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Her Majesty's Fall (limerick)
The Queen said "I'm going to the mall"
the King said "darling go have a ball"
when she returned late night
he couldn't watch her plight
she was groggy and about to fall
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Comments
Rula
Thu, 2016-04-07 01:09
a fun write Raj
maybe you need to rework the beginning of the last line.
[she was] groggy and about to fall ..for a better meter unless you feel happy with it. Always good to give a new form a try.
Good shoot with her and his majesties. :)
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raj
Thu, 2016-04-07 13:02
Thanks Rula for your time,
Thanks Rula for your time, comment and suggestion. Your suggestion is spot on, therefore implemented already.
Good to know you found this funny. I was wondering if it would be viewed as "profanity" . Since this one is apparently acceptable, I will have a go with one more :)
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
mand
Wed, 2016-05-04 05:34
Haha
This made me giggle. I have a vision of a very drunk Queen and a very embarrassed King. I reckon there must be a lot of Kings and Queens out there like that! Lol
I love your imagination and the fun loving nature of this poem.
Love to you
Mand xxx
lovedly
Wed, 2016-05-04 08:42
All know its only Kings and more QUEENS
Who can go to a mall
and have a fall
as they play with heaven knows whose balls
limericks 'tis after all
king can save his once for all
when a drunken sunken one returns
and asks
where am I
Where are yours!
mand
Wed, 2016-05-04 09:10
Hahahah
Love your comment Loved.
Mand xxx
lovedly
Fri, 2016-05-06 03:33
thanx
from the humorist me
raj
Wed, 2016-05-04 15:15
Hi Lovedly
Thanks for your read and humorous comment...
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
lovedly
Wed, 2016-05-04 21:43
as always
i send greetings to those who deserve
ur 1
raj
Wed, 2016-05-04 15:14
Hi Mand
Good to see you back. Thanks for the time, visit and comment. Good to know you liked it.
Much love..
raj (sublime_ocean)
mand
Fri, 2016-05-06 03:14
Thanks Raj
Looking forward to being more interactive! :)
Loads of love
Mand xxx
mand
Fri, 2016-05-06 03:39
Opps
Sorry - Pressed save twice!
raj
Fri, 2016-05-06 14:49
never mind...a good way to
never mind...a good way to make up ..lol..
raj (sublime_ocean)
raj
Mon, 2018-01-29 14:26
Hahaha...being a limmerick
Hahaha...being a limmerick tried to pack it with fun....wondering if i should mail it to Buckingham Palace...even the Queen deserves a hearty laugh..what do ya think:)
Cheers!
raj (sublime_ocean)
raj
Mon, 2018-01-29 15:18
Really? I wish i had her
Really? I wish i had her email ID to send it to her...fun apart...good to know you liked it...may be I will try a few more limericks...
Regards..
raj (sublime_ocean)