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Fair Maid
Eyes deep and radiant
within the fairest face;
a figure lithe and lean.
Each curve and gradient
exudes melodic grace,
through sweater and old jeans.
Though temperatures rise
and pulse beats start to pound,
in bust of perfect size
a loving heart is bound.
More fair than meets the eye;
look deep, for looks belie.
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Comments
Keith Logan
Thu, 2016-11-24 21:42
Nobody is perfect
She may be the best person one is liable to meet but everyone has their flaws.
Keith Logan
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chevyvent
Wed, 2016-11-30 18:27
Excellent writing
Very nice flow with piece excellent writing I'm now a fan of yours.
Your friend,
Mario Vitale
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Keith Logan
Sun, 2016-12-04 09:22
I'm not at all comfortable
with the notion of fans. There are many poets here I admire and read avidly but I stop short of following, being content to read as they make new posts.
Keith Logan
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K William
Tue, 2017-02-21 17:18
Well, I can't read anymore.
Well, I can't read anymore. Thank you. I don't .know what goes wrong with the first stanza, it seems way out to me. Clunky is the word I would use. Perhaps a rewrite, I think ... 'In sweater and old jeans', maybe.
Keith Logan
Tue, 2017-02-21 20:56
As I said
on another poem's comments, sorry if my writing style upsets you in any way.
Keith Logan
the happy chappy
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