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another silly poetry
Exquisite love poetry
If only you had
honoured those
who to your poems
bring victory...
You sought me
I came over
you read one or two
then slept,
O lover
you don't know me
nor will your candle show
yes through your poetry
and
my comments,
perhaps
my name shall also glow
do some sympathy show
and
light the other's candles
so that they may not blow
must also like yours flow
All poets here must know....
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
lovedly
Tue, 2017-04-11 12:01
raise the silly
bar i could jump 6 feet
high jump not pole vault
Keith Logan
Thu, 2017-04-13 11:30
Hi Lovedly
I am surprised this has not garnered more comments, I like it. It has an old world feel to it that appeals to my own old fashioned sensibilities. In fact the only line I would be tempted to change is "nor your candle will show" to something like "nor will your candle show."
Keith Logan
the happy chappy
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lovedly
Thu, 2017-04-13 12:19
Thanks KL
on most sites
it's not poetry that is appreciated
but my friend wrote it
so I must read it
kind of humans around
you and I are old to know
that poets love poet's flow
and
your suggestion I cannot forego
hence I shall amend it as follows
'''nor will your candle show''