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Definitions
Pain
Smashes suddenly
With an iron fist
In soft spots
Help
Spite
White hot
Churning Words
Without thought
Hurt
Hate
Darkness
In the heart
Stupidity
Amok
Envy
Taking
With the mind
Someone else's
Best
War
Roaring
Black and red
Monster of
Death
Pride
Swelling
Ego,sometimes
Deserving, often
Not
Sin
Tear in
The fabric
Of one's
Soul
Death
No breath
Or thought but
Sparkling
Light
Friend
Sharing
Feelings and
Same hearted
Love
Faith
Belief
Unshakable
Lifeline to
God
Gift
Something
Freely given
A Piece of
Heart
Doubt
Questions
Unanswered
Wobbly thoughts
Collapse
Peace
Quiet
Time of love,
Heaven on
Earth
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Editing stage:
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Comments
Geezer
Fri, 2017-06-16 17:06
I guess...
that I can see where the title might be apt. I like the statement of the one word and then a terse explanation of what it means to the writer. It works for me. ~ Geezer.
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Eumolpus
Fri, 2017-06-16 18:08
your poem
I really enjoyed the originality of presenting a few touches to define a word. I consider them very well constructed, like tight Imagist poetry. Because I think they are so well done, I do not like the title, which makes them seem more trite, as ramblings of thought. They are little gems!
I also generally dislike the style of one word to a line poetry,
I
don't
understand
why
people write
poems
like
that
but it works great here, as each word has significance and enough weight to carry a line. It gives each word a charge.
So i think this is an outstanding poem.
Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings
wesley snow
Sun, 2017-06-18 20:07
My only complaint...
is that I believe this to be free verse and not structured western. Otherwise, I agree with Eumolpus.
W. H. Snow
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