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A Few Things I Don’t Know
Millions have come and gone away
none has ever come back till this day
then why amass wealth
and leave it all, who for
can the wisest one really say
Yes
You will be remembered by those
who enjoy the wealth you left behind
but how will you ever know
since while living foolish you were also
O the wisest one you alone have a brain
Come over we will catch the next train
and roam about till the wealth does sustain
kick me off, far off. when nothing does remain
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
gregwa8
Wed, 2018-06-06 03:51
a nice reminder to live with
a nice reminder to live with the right kind of wealth in mind: blessing others.
lovedly
Wed, 2018-06-06 14:23
Such a thoughtful comment
and coming from a great songster
elates me like a balloon
many tried to deflate soon
thank you for the kindness
of time spent on
POEMS OF
Lovedly
U R NO MORE
a lol
MAIDEN
raj
Wed, 2018-06-06 14:41
Hi Lovedly
I believe this is one of your more serious writes which is substantive and has the potential to tidy it up...will watch what edits you do going forward...i found the concluding line jarring...
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raj (sublime_ocean)
lovedly
Wed, 2018-06-06 14:55
why did you find it jarring
that's the finality of all existence
when one's pockets are empty finally
one is done
do advise I am always open
raj
Wed, 2018-06-06 15:16
because I consider wealth as
because I consider wealth as not just material / money but it is much more than that
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raj (sublime_ocean)
lovedly
Wed, 2018-06-06 16:47
yes I get ur point
but I had Omar Khayyam in mind
Shall review
raj
Wed, 2018-06-06 16:34
Lovedly is this really about
Lovedly is this really about your poetry and comments or your observations about me and my life style?
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raj (sublime_ocean)