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Deep down Blues
Today I have the blues,
The deep sad blues:
Me, staring at the world
And nothing really wrong,
Just that I cannot be there,
Where my heart desires
To be.
Earlier I received a beckon
That set my hunger for truth;
Only my light dimmed on me.
And now these cravings
For deep beautiful mystery
Bring a sad emotional swell
To my eyes.
And unable to be there,
I can only weep
Tears of sweet sadness.
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THE DEEP DOWN BLUES
Today I have the blues, the deep sad blues:
just staring out in space, and nothing wrong,
my misty tears in search where joys belong,
to sweep my dears in heart’s embracing hues.
A beckon came to light my shore, and set
my search for truth, but sparks of shining sea
In waves of light that dawns, now dims on me:
my spirit captured, rolled in leaden net
So now I sit to wash and face the pains,
that bring this deep sad hunger for release;
-As cravings crawl in pain to pay the lease.
O cries of sadness, tears my soul now rains!
O sign, O symbol, you call my hunger
You force me purify a little longer.
Comments
Geezer
Sun, 2018-07-29 21:11
I get the impression...
that in the second stanza, you are speaking of someone giving you a come on, only to find that they were not serious or changed their mind. Maybe you can make that clearer? ~ Geezer.
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Rula
Mon, 2018-07-30 04:29
A bitter sweetness
coates these lines dear friend. I always like these emotional moments, for without them we don't value high the happy ones.
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raj
Mon, 2018-07-30 04:59
Tyro
a melancholic mood created in these verses...
this stanza:-
Earlier I received a beckon
That set my hunger for truth;
Only my light dimmed on me.
Sounded to me like:-
momentarily I saw a beacon
driving me to the truth
fading my light of hope.
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raj (sublime_ocean)
tyro
Mon, 2018-07-30 13:54
Hi Geezer
Your impression is basically right, but it is not about a person, but a state of mind. Your comment makes me think I should have used mind instead of heart. I following lines like, "a beckon
That set my hunger for truth;" and "cravings For deep beautiful mystery" was my attempt at clarification.
I very much appreciate your comment because I have a tendency to be obscure in my poetry.
T
The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight
tyro
Mon, 2018-07-30 13:57
Dear Rula
Dear Rula
thank you for feeling the mood of my poem. It makes me happy as I have always sensed the goodness of your heart.
T
The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight
tyro
Mon, 2018-07-30 14:05
Hi raj
Hi raj
I like you interpretation, only I would change it a bit.
momentarily I felt a beacon
pulling me toward truth
only inspiration left me
The point is I was not mentally strong enough at the moment to follow the beauty offered me.
T
The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight
raj
Mon, 2018-07-30 14:18
appreciate your response Tyro
appreciate your response Tyro
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raj (sublime_ocean)
tyro
Mon, 2018-07-30 14:15
Geezer
I set another version of the poem under, please tell me if this is more or less clear
T
The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight
lovedly
Mon, 2018-07-30 17:04
when there is time
do read a poem
i have a similar poem in mind
for your kind
soonly
it will transform into poetry
not here they warned me