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Why Did I Love You? [August Contest]
It is a mystery
Whose answer I cannot fathom
Maybe it was because you bewitched me
With the gaze from your cold eyes
Like Medusa and transfixed me to the spot
Perhaps it was the way you made me feel
How my heart skipped beats
Upon seeing you
Or how you set free butterflies in my stomach
Or maybe it was because my heart refused to listen to my head
All I have are speculations
Second guesses to why
But I can never answer the question
Why?
Why did I Love You?
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing stage:
Contest:
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Comments
Rula
Thu, 2018-08-16 15:55
Hello Z
Good reasons listed there. Wish you the best.
The line
"With the gaze from you're cold"
You're should be 'your' as you're is the abbreviation of [you are]
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Zeussirius
Fri, 2018-08-17 05:19
Thank you very much the you
Thank you very much the you're and your was due to autocorrect.
raj
Fri, 2018-08-17 05:39
Hi Z
to qualify for the contest please suffix [August Contest] to the title
best wishes for the contest..
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raj (sublime_ocean)
Geezer
Fri, 2018-08-17 14:45
Good work...
Add the [August Contest] and get entered! ~ Geezer.
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Zeussirius
Sat, 2018-08-18 13:35
Okay I'll do that thank you
Okay I'll do that thank you both.
lovedly
Sat, 2018-08-18 22:07
well all the best
in the contest
you don't know why
as yet
anyone can bet
Zeussirius
Sun, 2018-08-19 06:03
I don't understand?
I don't understand?
lovedly
Sun, 2018-08-19 22:30
perhaps if you read the contest requirement you may find the ans
answer
But I can never answer the question
Why?
Why did I Love You?
all the best still