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Silly Me
I travelled once to the land of imagery
Where I bumped into a poe-tree
That fruits a tasting variety
Of alliteration and simile
I dunno, they fell on me
Ever since I scribble poetry.
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Geezer
Mon, 2019-03-11 15:23
A funny take...
on what we poets do. I'm not sure when I was first really attracted to poetry and thinking that I could do that! I like the way you brought our attention to [similes, alliteration and imagery] and the clever
poe-tree line. ~ Geezer.
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Rula
Tue, 2019-03-12 17:27
Gee
Much appreciate your kind visit. I hoped that this would bring more traffic of poets telling how did they start their scrabbling.
Much appreciate it.
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Eumolpus
Mon, 2019-03-11 22:43
I guess that's what we do!
I would call it po-e-tree. you need the "eh" in poetry.
Keep scribbling!
Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings
Rula
Tue, 2019-03-12 17:32
Mark
Many thanks. In fact It's the tree thing that I was looking for rather than the transcription of the word, but I do appreciate your thoughts and suggestions.
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scribbler
Tue, 2019-03-12 23:57
Hi Rula
That same dang tree fell on me TWICE. Once about 50 years ago when I wrote my first poem. But my hard head didn't take the first hint so another treee was felled on me about 10 years ago when I promptly wrote my second poem lol. Enjoyed you light hearted but hardly silly poem........stan
Rula
Thu, 2019-03-14 05:01
Ha
thank you Stan. I'm happy to know that the poe-tree did its job quite perfectly hehehe.
Thanks for the kind visit. Much appreciate it!
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raj
Wed, 2019-03-13 13:42
good one Rula...
good one Rula...
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raj (sublime_ocean)
Rula
Thu, 2019-03-14 05:04
Hello Raj
Wonder where have you been.
Truly missed your posts here.
Looking forward to reading yours soon.
Thanks for passing by.
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raj
Thu, 2019-03-14 07:50
Lost the muse ...hope it
Lost the muse ...hope it returns...
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raj (sublime_ocean)
Rula
Mon, 2019-03-18 02:33
Hope so
too raj!
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Cloudthings
Thu, 2019-03-14 08:36
Hey Rula!
This made me smile, a good indication it hit the spot - enjoyed your playfulness & the rhythm & articulation were great.
Beaute little poem from the Poe-tree!
Cheers
Anni
My dear friend always told me "Water the seeds of joy first"
Rula
Mon, 2019-03-18 02:32
Ha
Thank you Anni... Much appreciate your kind visit to my page
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Cloudthings
Mon, 2019-03-18 14:05
Just rereading
I love this as it is... but wondered if you wanted it to have a neater rhythmic flow you could try these two last lines to keep the fit better?
"I travelled once to the land of imagery
Where I bumped into a poe-tree
That fruits a tasting variety
Of alliteration and simile"
I dunno how, they fell on me
Ever since I scribble poetry.
Just a thought xx
Cheers
Anni
My dear friend always told me "Water the seeds of joy first"
Rula
Wed, 2019-03-20 09:59
Can't agree more.
Shall implement the suggestion with much appreciation for the spot on feedback.
Thank you anni
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trekker
Mon, 2019-03-18 18:39
Silly Me
I love it and the length is perfect. A very clever piece in which I love the imagery of the tree. This is a keeper! Thankyou
Rula
Wed, 2019-03-20 09:58
Thank you
Trekker.
My pleasure to see you reading my little piece, and finding it clever adds to my pleasure.
Thank you
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