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A Leaf, A Journey
I laughed in the summer sun
I twirled and danced had fun
There on this high place I knew of life
This was me great fun no strife
Then chill winds did blow
My life source started fading away
Colours were changed each day
Green to gold it was the way
Secrets not told to me
How my life force failed
I would fall and be so alone
This is all you need as one
My life source did let me go
I felt so free then I started to flow
Down from the heavens you see
To touch the earth more to be
Why was this life so cruel to me?
A summer on high now this destiny
Laying here is this eternity
No I was told by my Mother tree
So day on day I let things go
To the Earth each part just so
There to change once more
Particles through forest floor
I became a food source
That my Mother held
She took me set me free
A bud on a beautiful tree
Comments
Geezer
Mon, 2019-03-18 10:43
The way...
of life. From bud to leaf, to fallen feed of the forest! Elegant and charming look at the continuity of life.
~Gee.
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Sparrow
Tue, 2019-04-16 19:39
Gee
Thanks for your visit and I am pleased that you liked this write,
Take care out there and know you are thought of, Yours, Ian
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lovedly
Sat, 2019-04-13 14:39
Ian
you and I
are now like two
yellow leaves
lying lonely STREWN
as once were twins
in GARDEN OF ADEN
not E
do u agree
Sparrow
Tue, 2019-04-16 19:41
Loved
Many thanks for your visit but Aden is only what we make of it even the desert has a beauty to behold and write of, As to laying around turning yellow not a chance Summer is coming lol
Yours as always Ian ..
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lovedly
Wed, 2019-04-17 18:13
that guy told me he was very sexual
now @72
he was like a leaf yellow below
You talk of the brighter side of life
Ian
as if you were @16
still lying low
below
let all behold
@77
you have solid gold
lol----INKON
Sparrow
Wed, 2019-04-17 19:54
Loved
You are but young, but my spirit hovers around 36 always, and it will stay there lol. A pure love of a life that was always out of reach keeps you young lol Take care and good to see you, Yours Ian ..
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scribbler
Tue, 2019-04-16 23:29
Hi Ian
Yep everything recycles which kinda makes me wonder why so many people seek coffins which will almost never decay.I like your poem but wonder why you chose to go with such varied rhyme patterns....stan
Sparrow
Wed, 2019-04-17 19:57
Stan
If I was a true poet I would write with few errors, but as the words flow so I write, only the great Elf has held my sway to write poetry the correct way. lol You take care and rest a while as your walks among the aspens will be with us soon, Yours as always Ian ..
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Unconditional love to you all.
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lovedly
Wed, 2019-04-17 18:17
LIKE ME iAN YOU HAVE used No punctuations
then why the isolated ? mark
Ian