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The balance
The Dragon
creature of fire and smoke
burning all
where ever it goes
The Butterfly
creature of flowers and sun
pollinating all
where ever it goes
it was the butterfly
who taught the dragon
how to fly
it was the dragon
who taught the butterfly
how to survive
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Comments
scribbler
Wed, 2019-05-22 18:09
Hi Eddie
I tried my best to find a suggestion for improvement but came up empty. Maybe some of the free verse specialists can be of some assistance. BTW i liked this...stan
Eduardo Cruz
Thu, 2019-06-13 15:54
Stan
Thank you!!
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
scribbler
Wed, 2019-05-22 18:10
Hi Eddie
double post
Race_9togo
Wed, 2019-05-22 23:13
Hey Eddie,
No criticism, except it too short!
But...just appreciation. Simple, direct, and deep.
Good stuff man.
Respectfully, Race
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Eduardo Cruz
Thu, 2019-06-13 15:56
Jim
Thanks for stopping by and reading!!
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
Seren
Mon, 2023-01-09 14:45
Ello :)
I hope you're ok I have missed you old friend
I agree with Jim it's too short But I love it!!
love and hugs xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Seren
Mon, 2023-01-09 14:46
Ello :)
I hope you're ok I have missed you old friend
I agree with Jim it's too short But I love it!!
love and hugs xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Candlewitch
Tue, 2023-01-10 10:54
like Seren...
I miss you Eddie, and wish you well.
*love, Cat
*ever, eddy
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