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SILENTLY INVADE HEAVEN
Avoid extended grief
in a closeted coffin
all are now thinking
of final cremation
ultimate death be simple
ashes in to the nearest ravine
define
fish and tadpoles meat
no chair
no seat
about the bushes
don't beat
one is neither
veg nor meat
minerals water
now only
be happy
no one will weep
all in
Q
are silently lonely
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
MODIFICATION OF DEPARTURES SAVE TREES
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Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Geezer
Wed, 2020-11-18 08:32
I am not sure...
that 'electricfication' is the word you want, Lovedly. I think that the word you need, is [cremation]. Yes, it does save trees, but also land! Why keep a piece of land from being used by something else and spending money on a grave-site [mausoleums in particular], when after a generation or two, no one goes there? If it were not for perpetual maintaince, most grave-sites would be choked with weeds and unkempt within a couple of years. Besides, if you have someone cremated, you can keep their ashes close by, on the mantle or bedside table! Then when no one remembers who is in there or why the ashes are kept, they can empty them down the toilet and put some pretty flowers in the urn! ~ Geez.
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lovedly
Tue, 2020-11-17 10:57
thanks GEEZ
Electric cremation
yes
and no need to save ashes
just flush
not in toilet
but let it flow in a stream or spread in a garden of roses
most mineralized manure
recycle everything
save energy why waste it
One day we will also merge with nature
and
that's for sure .
so love endure
lovedly
Wed, 2020-11-18 14:41
ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh geeeeeeee
i cremated it
as said thee
Geezer
Thu, 2020-11-19 09:57
Two...
thumbs up! ~ Geez.
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lovedly
Thu, 2020-11-19 11:08
THREE
I must honour thee
Gee