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SILENT STEALERS WE..... two versions
When you steal a kiss
and
seal it
it is a stolen one
never will be forgotten..
and
every time you vibrate
with a different one
energy changes drastically
depends on how fast you are
to bring about drastic change
in your own life's game
be it day or night
change is always deservedly right
use all your might
two in one
silent moment
Second Version
When you steel a kiss
and
seal it
it is a stolen one
will never be forgotten
and
every time you vibrate
or
oscillate
with a different one
energy
changes fantastically
drastically
depends on how speedy you are
to bring about a marvelous
change
in your very own
life's passionate game
be it day or night
change is always
deservedly right
use all your might
to make it blisteringly bright
two in one
silent moment
steal or steel
it must cement
and will
Comments
Geezer
Fri, 2020-12-04 07:50
I like...
the first one best. It is less complicated and makes the point just as easily. ~ Geez.
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Lavender
Fri, 2020-12-04 09:50
Silent Stealers We
Hi, Lovedly,
I agree with Geezer - I like the first version better. It seems simpler and more straight to the point, much like a stolen kiss.
Thank you!
L
lovedly
Fri, 2020-12-04 11:10
thanks
Gee and Lav