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Sea of Beauty (Jan Contest)
Sea of beauty
lies only in some azure eyes
I 'm a cynosure of all eyes
love in my eyes
alone does lie
I never cry
lose or win
bear abuse
my eyes shed a tear
to wash off the glue
I call
Narcissism
call it what ever may you
I have azure eyes so blue
come and see me
if you wish to
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
Eyes are the only mirrors of truth
Editing stage:
Contest:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Lavender
Fri, 2021-01-29 18:04
Sea of Beauty
Hi, Lovedly,
My interpretation of your poem is that it is the sea speaking - the center of attention for all eyes. Such an intriguing poem - leaves me wanting to know more about the third stanza - "...the glue I call Narcissism."
Thank you!
L
lovedly
Fri, 2021-01-29 18:21
just google narcissism
glue you know
fluid though
sticks deep into
egoists bones
and
synapses of mind
denude
and in the admixture the fixer
who always thinks every move is a sixer
lol now
lav
Ray Whitaker
Fri, 2021-01-29 20:10
The glue called narcissism...
Narcissism is such a poor set of behaviours, and so pervasive...
Nice piece you wrote.
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lovedly
Fri, 2021-01-29 23:12
Thanks Ray
for your review
sad narcissists are unaware
they get dissolved in glue
you know.
in the sea or river water
they drown appreciating their own reflection
amen
Geezer
Fri, 2021-01-29 23:26
One word...
YES!
There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.
lovedly
Fri, 2021-01-29 23:58
yes Gee
I miss jess and thee
happy we will be at sea
lol
tc
lovedly
Sat, 2021-01-30 11:28
The sea is vast
back into it
we all are cast
full mast
lovedly
Sat, 2021-01-30 16:46
Thanks 15
A good return '
may you get employed by a
Ships Captain
lol
ember
Sat, 2021-01-30 20:40
amazing!!
this poem is for sure gonna be in my head for the rest of the day
post tenebras lux
lovedly
Sat, 2021-01-30 22:36
Thanks
I've read and commented on yours
GO OUT INTO
the wilderness
alone you may be
all by yourself
but never lonely
nature will accompany
ember
Sun, 2021-01-31 00:30
thank you
thank you for your response, it made me smile :-)
post tenebras lux
lovedly
Sun, 2021-01-31 11:05
ha ha haaaaa
lol thanks
Rula
Mon, 2021-02-01 11:54
Lovedly
So many good lines here. I wish you'd trim some lines for a more profound poem.
Good one.
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lovedly
Mon, 2021-02-01 14:45
It's passed the competition hour 31 Jan
Rula how I wish
you'd read it earlier
will miss first prize
rarely matters
now old age devours
all desires
you've read it
is all that does matter
thanks
lovedly
Fri, 2021-02-05 18:52
Rula hardly matters for a sans all neopot lol
missed first prize
rarely matters