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WHEN I AM OLD (challenge contest)
I used to think when I am old
that I will be this or be that
But as blood thins with coming cold
I've worn many a different hat.
So now that I have reached that age
i look back and laugh at young ambitions.
Once in a while I even rage
at the chosen false directions.
The trail behind fades with its length,
The one before me isn't near as long.
So I just hope I have the strength
to sing the ending of my song.
And any hoped for passing fame
I am now content won't come my way.
I'll become a minor extinguished flame
snuffed and discarded on the way.....
Dare I hope some distant day
one person might recall my words
which I scribbled down while on my way
and not consider them absurd?
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
OK another rare one posted straight from hollow head to page lol
Editing stage:
Contest:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Midge
Wed, 2021-04-21 20:02
Wow!
A great last line - I was surprised by it and even laughed a little.
scribbler
Wed, 2021-04-21 21:16
Hi Midge
Always good to see somebody new show up. welcome to neopoet. should you run into problems here just holler. If i can't help I'll do my best to point you to somebody who can. now that last line......There was no other word that popped into mind that rhymed lol
scribbler
Wed, 2021-04-21 21:17
Hi Midge
Always good to see somebody new show up. welcome to neopoet. should you run into problems here just holler. If i can't help I'll do my best to point you to somebody who can. now that last line......There was no other word that popped into mind that rhymed lol
Heartfelt
Thu, 2021-04-22 00:13
turds
I THOUGHT IT WAS AWESOME UNTIL YOU SAID TURDS
Heartfelt
Thu, 2021-04-22 00:13
turds
I THOUGHT IT WAS AWESOME UNTIL YOU SAID TURDS
scribbler
Thu, 2021-04-22 01:37
LOL
As stated this was posted without any edit. BUT one day I'll come back and see if i can improve the ending
Midge
Tue, 2021-04-27 21:19
Scribbler...
I am sorry you have spoiled a very funny ending!
scribbler
Tue, 2021-04-27 23:37
Well I almost never let a poem stand unchanged so I might
just decide to chang it back
lovedly
Tue, 2021-04-27 21:35
Stan why
when
I wonder
scribbler
Tue, 2021-04-27 23:38
What?
This is pretty obscure
lovedly
Wed, 2021-04-28 16:44
YOUR TITLE SAYS
WHEN I AM OLD
I was wondering why you said
when
lol
though ur not as old as me yet
stan
nice poem tho
scribbler
Wed, 2021-04-28 17:56
Ever notice how the definition of
old keeps getting higher as years pile up?lol
lovedly
Wed, 2021-04-28 22:43
Wait then
learn
Pole Vault
while the wait is on
and ur aiming the sky lol stan
scribbler
Thu, 2021-04-29 00:47
I actually used to pole vault in high school.
Wasn't that good at it but the competition wasn't either so I'd sometimes place second lol
lovedly
Thu, 2021-04-29 12:37
Be happy
In ALL my life I have never been No 1
except today
another site guy
has placed me as No 1
........... ''poet for this week.........'''
thanks to thee mostly '
Stan
and
NEOS
for all your teachings and blessings