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When lights go out come again
When lights go out come again
think of me
a lonely bird flying sky high
am I the eagle you are in search
come to me when the lights go off
comfort me more than yourself
many told me today
they read me I'm good
but they leave no comments
lest I burst
they know not the time of travel
to the invisible universe
eternity
infinity
written in the language of the galaxy
even day light cannot change it
so abide with me
when the real time comes
no one will be showing the path unwritten
so burn your egos
read all poetry
of Neo
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
This is in first person only NO SELF PRAISE as one brands me
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Geezer
Tue, 2021-11-23 23:15
Okay...
Yes, we all want to be remembered! There are those of us that will, and those of us that won't! I do believe that you have got a good one here Lovedly; [as long as it isn't self-praise/ego]. 'Cause if I find out .... LoL ~ Geez.
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lovedly
Tue, 2021-11-23 23:26
GEE
Thanks finally many like you know me jess always kicked me then held me like a football no self goal thanks i have been here like stan longest less owing to techy mistakes hence different names
Ray Whitaker
Wed, 2021-11-24 23:13
A very good piece
Really like how and where you took this.
The last three lines while complementary of Neopoet, (well deserved of course!) seem out of place to me…. Really really like the poem without those lines.
‘Course this is just my opinion…
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lovedly
Thu, 2021-11-25 13:08
Thanks Dear Ray
read w/o......