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There's no reason why
There's no reason why Julie came into my life. My sadness throughout my body. Was like a cancer that consomme ever wish and desire . I had a love that I thought we would bend the tracks of time. Unfortunately forever would be the saddness the day Brenda died. So one day Julie came into my life .l was hopeless without logic no reason to try. But hope gave me a reason when I looked deep into her eyes
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Rosewood Apothecary
Fri, 2022-08-12 17:46
I would format differently
There's no reason why Julie came into my life
My sadness throughout my body
Was like a cancer that consumed every wish and desire
I had a love that I thought we would bend the tracks of time Unfortunately forever would be
the saddness the day Brenda died
So one day Julie came into my life
l was hopeless without logic no reason to try
But hope gave me a reason
when I looked deep into her eyes
Forgive my intrusion but I believe I fixed it?
I love it,
Tim
Rosewood Apothecary
Fri, 2022-08-12 17:46
I would format differently
There's no reason why Julie came into my life
My sadness throughout my body
Was like a cancer that consumed every wish and desire
I had a love that I thought we would bend the tracks of time Unfortunately forever would be
the saddness the day Brenda died
So one day Julie came into my life
l was hopeless without logic no reason to try
But hope gave me a reason
when I looked deep into her eyes
Forgive my intrusion but I believe I fixed it?
I love it,
Tim
Ray Whitaker
Sun, 2022-08-21 14:34
Tim’s suggestions are what I would recommend too
His suggestions are great.
Otherwise this is a “note to self” sorta thing…
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