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Love Story
She never says the words “I'm sorry”
But she reveals their substance
when she takes my open hand
in her way, saying all that is needed
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Last few words:
Another excersise in brevity. How much can you say in so few words...
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Seren
Tue, 2023-01-24 00:43
Dear Michael
Absolutely beautiful!!
This is short but tells a whole story of love
I offer nothing but well done!!!
Kind regards Jayne-Chloe
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Michael Anthony
Sat, 2023-01-28 11:47
Thaks Seren. I was definitely
Thanks Seren. I was definitely trying to see how much story I could put into so few words. I think it worked a bit.
Best
Michael Anthony
lovedly
Tue, 2023-01-24 02:32
Brevity conveys
abs silence
as I say all
Silently
Rosewood Apothecary
Tue, 2023-01-24 05:21
Sometimes
The words I’m sorry are just words. Changed behaviors or loving patience are better gestures to make amends and empty words ever were.
Tim
Michael Anthony
Sat, 2023-01-28 11:48
Absolutely, and well said!
Absolutely, and well said!
Best
Michael Anthony
Candlewitch
Tue, 2023-01-24 11:23
yes...
sometimes words are unnecessary.
*hugs, Cat
*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
Michael Anthony
Sat, 2023-01-28 12:03
Agreed - thanks Cat! Best
Agreed - thanks Cat!
Best
Michael Anthony
Jackweb
Thu, 2023-01-26 15:59
A succinct poem
Most times has a lot to reveal yet it is spoken in a few line. Nice job!
.
"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
Michael Anthony
Sat, 2023-01-28 12:05
Thank you J! Best
Thank you J!
Best
Michael Anthony
RoseBlack
Fri, 2023-01-27 10:10
Actions
Speak louder than words....sometimes it is a simple gesture that lets us know how one feels. Well done.
~RoseBlack~
Michael Anthony
Sat, 2023-01-28 12:06
Yes, took me a while to
Yes, took me a while to understand this RB, thank you.
Best
Michael Anthony
Lavender
Fri, 2023-01-27 20:04
Love Story
Hello, Michael,
The image of the open hand brings it all together here. Beautiful.
L
Michael Anthony
Sat, 2023-01-28 12:07
Thanks L, glad you liked this
Thanks L, glad you liked this one. That particular line was the biggest challenge to compress in my short poem. May have worked.
Best
Michael Anthony