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Once you all switch to Free verse things will get worse
Once you all switch to Free verse things will get worse
a curse
Loved has made all forget
what was poetry and verse
and
the best critique we all know,
will my cruci-fixation rehearse
ere that happens,
guys go back to your archaicity
and
leave my precious verse
to and for me...
I must thank thee
if you want to see
the bard survive in me...
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
judyanne
Thu, 2012-05-17 05:08
wow loved
one that really shares your particular genius here
great language use
just one thing
'the bestest critique we all know' - - 'bestest' to 'best' - the first is not a word :)
great word visual here with the hyphen loved
'will my cruci-fixation rehearse'
i really like
'guys go back to your archaicity
and
leave my precious verse
to and for me...'
love judy
xxxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
loved
Thu, 2012-05-17 06:20
Thanks Judy
I have like Shakespeare always did
created three new words
by now you know which
Best -test ..... a hyphen maybe could be added
cruci-fixation not really crucifixation
and archaicity..like being ancient
Thanks for your contribution
I adore you Judy
loved
judyanne
Thu, 2012-05-17 07:43
yes
i liked the other two coinages
but 'bestest' to me just conjures others' use in speech that is bad english
a hyphen would fix that
xxx
i love you too loved
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
loved
Thu, 2012-05-17 08:27
thanks shall replace as best
no hyphenation here
loved