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lost in the ripples
Mirrored mountains gleam
Ripples erase reflections
Water moves away
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Comments
weirdelf
Sat, 2012-12-29 06:30
A lovely haiku
with the most profound quality required of haiku
"Water moves away"
Brilliant!
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
Seren
Sun, 2012-12-30 01:52
thanks Jess
I appreciate it I've been writing lots of haiku I am exploring the boundaries
Cheers Jc xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Rula
Sat, 2012-12-29 11:17
Painted really well lovely!!
Painted really well
lovely!!
❤❤❤❤❤❤
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Seren
Sun, 2012-12-30 01:53
thanks Rula
Very glad you like it
Regards Jc x
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Seren
Sun, 2012-12-30 01:56
hey Beau
I really appreciate your comment ... I finished another today will post it later tonight
Love Jc xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
BlueDemon77
Sat, 2012-12-29 23:14
I am lost in the ripples with you.
Perfect image, placid, I can see, hear, smell, and feel it. Wonderful work!
Ron
Blue Demon77
"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."
The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath
Seren
Sun, 2012-12-30 02:01
Ron
Thank you so much I've been working hard on the series there are many more just not ready for posting
Thanks for the great comment makes it all worthwhile
Regards Jc xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Ian.T
Sun, 2012-12-30 03:56
Jayne
A good Haiku now here is one for you:-
Serendipity (happy accident (;-)
when all our poets dreams come true
They should write it down
Have a lovely day hey, Yours Ian.T
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Seren
Sun, 2012-12-30 04:35
smiles for miles
And the answer to your haiku will be my next post in half an hour lol
Glad you liked it
Love always Jc xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
scribbler
Sun, 2012-12-30 19:06
Hi Jayne
Dang! Now you've got Me thinking about Haiku and I never can write just one lol. I liked the way you pointed out the delicacy of reflections on water..............stan
Seren
Fri, 2013-01-04 08:22
hey Stan
Really glad you enjoyed my little haiku ... I've been bothered by the Muse of late lol
Look forward to reading a haiku from you !!
Love Jc xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
weirdelf
Fri, 2013-01-04 08:34
hey Stan
remember my "Haikookas"?
You can write haikus in a series, but the condition is each one must be able to stand alone.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
sueb
Mon, 2012-12-31 05:58
gorgeous
gorgeous
Seren
Fri, 2013-01-04 08:23
Thanks Sue glad you liked it
Thanks Sue glad you liked it
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats