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christmas
The near full moon
hangs
pregnant
bright
on this starry Christmas-eve night
I think of the young Mary
about to labour the pain of creation
and hold her new babe
oblivious
to future agony
.
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Free verse
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Comments
weirdelf
Mon, 2012-12-24 12:12
Every Xmas I watch all 4 'Alien' movies
It strike me as incredible apposite that a foreign being implants itself in a human being then emerges to try and take over the species, teehee.
The last 2 lines almost make this a Christmas poem worth writing and reading.
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judyanne
Wed, 2013-01-23 08:20
lol
your cynicism is showing jess
thanks for the read and comment
love judy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
Rula
Mon, 2012-12-24 12:32
Hi Judy
as usual painted really well!
Do you really need the "the" before Young Mary?
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judyanne
Wed, 2013-01-23 08:22
thanks rula
and yes - i think i do need the 'the'
- it (imo) stresses 'the mary', not just any mary if you know what i mean?
love judy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
chumfin
Mon, 2012-12-31 06:42
good piece
i wish mary read how you summerised all her travails in on poet short brief,
judyanne
Wed, 2013-01-23 08:23
hey chumfin
so lovely to see you
thanks so much for the kind comments
love judy
\xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
Frenchf
Sun, 2013-01-06 01:03
Interesting view point
Well presented. Steeped in Catholicism one would never look at it that way. Or is it just me? Would like to know your religious belief
judyanne
Wed, 2013-01-23 08:26
hello frenchf
lol - i would like to know my religious beliefs :)
thanks for the kind comment
love judy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
judyanne
Mon, 2013-01-28 11:12
sorry eph
i didn't see this earlier
thank you very much me lud for the kind comment
love judd
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)