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S l u m b e r S e n c h
shadowdream
the stillness
no brisk
take
everything at the edge
waiting
exhale bids of steam
a ruin house of knowing
sharpened like the best
ideals
speaks with invisible
spice
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Comments
Frenchf
Wed, 2013-02-06 14:25
Liked it all
except exhaling bids of steam
any other word other than bids or have I missed some image?
Esker
Wed, 2013-02-06 20:43
Walk through.....
Have you been to an auction?
a tri actor race
Have you not bid to your gods
relishments
Like prayer silk tied to branches
Steam like silk parchments
with inked prayers rising
a bid to the Gods of weather
ghosts
ancestors
the higher power
Breath at night rising
to the stars
laying in the fall
on park benchs
an offering of life force
vapor
I like that you dont demand
that you word it thus
Your image is missing because
perhaps you never really gambled
for anything
Or maybe you did and never lost
anything
I Have
I earned it
I gave it
I own it
Bid shall remain dear French
it is a humble entry to the greater
vaulted shift..
where I once walked
and still can
Thank You...
But I ask...What would you suggest..
(second asking)
Thank You!
Frenchf
Thu, 2013-02-07 13:21
No no you explained it. It should remain
I bid at Bridge but nowt else!
Esker
Thu, 2013-02-07 18:15
Clever!!
great reply but you got me thinking....
when I put in these devices now
I shall consider the other
hand to possible play