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Starlight
STARLIGHT
For you, my love, this Christmas time,
I only have this simple rhyme.
Though you, my love, deserve much more,
(You are the one that I adore)
If all the skies were empty; black,
No moon or stars to light your track,
Then I could set some sparkling stars
To light your way where 'ere you are.
And following your paths you'd see...
That every one leads back to me.
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
mand
Thu, 2010-12-23 05:38
So sweet and romantic.
Lovely sentiments, brilliant rhyming and meter.
Loved reading this one.
Love Mand xxxxxx
Tam the Chanter
Thu, 2010-12-23 06:31
romance
Glad you liked it, Mand. It should save me a fortune in christmas presents lol.
Merry Christmas !!
Ian xxx
TIME FLIES LIKE AN ARROW, BUT FRUIT FLIES LIKE A BANANA
Kailashana2
Thu, 2010-12-23 06:44
Lol. (Expect her to expect a
Lol. (Expect her to expect a present under the tree.)
Lovely thought...."every path leads back to me." How long have you been married? Bless you both.
hugs,
Anna
Tam the Chanter
Thu, 2010-12-23 08:03
lucky
At a party in Edinburgh, 1968, I met Anne. We were married in September 1969. thanks for the kind words Anna,
Merry Christmas !!!
Ian xx
TIME FLIES LIKE AN ARROW, BUT FRUIT FLIES LIKE A BANANA
Tam the Chanter
Thu, 2010-12-23 14:06
Paths
Shirl, thank you for the encouraging words. I hope Santa is good to you
MERRY CHRISTMAS !!!
Love Ian xxx
TIME FLIES LIKE AN ARROW, BUT FRUIT FLIES LIKE A BANANA
Tam the Chanter
Fri, 2010-12-24 14:35
sonnet
I would sonnetise it if it flowed freely, but it seems to have the life-span that it has and I really don't want to pad it out . Thanks for the interest though and the suggestion. Really glad you like it,
Ian
TIME FLIES LIKE AN ARROW, BUT FRUIT FLIES LIKE A BANANA