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The girl who married a tree
I read it in a newspaper
Many years ago
A marriage ceremony with a massive oak
The girl looked happy as can be
She wasn't simple folk
But yet she did request
A marriage with a tree
Wanted to spend her life in simple harmony
With a leafy green oak because she loved it so
Strange I thought
But she had sought
and with it she did go
And now I hear that this girl who married an oak tree
is very very happy, as happy as can be
The tree doesn,t cheat, the tree does't lie
The tree doesnt flirt or run off
The tree is as faithful as trees can be
Yes you are right we need to kiss trees
Perhaps like her we should marry these
They are solid and steady as oak
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Ian.T
Thu, 2013-02-21 19:13
Frenchf
A message from Barking mad where we have a splinter group very interested in the repercussions of Elvis's Wooden heart song.
I suppose any offcuts as they should be called would be just a chip off the old block, and probably avid readers of that kindling machine.
Well written and a little strange LOL.
Take care out there, Yours Ian.T
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
scribbler
Fri, 2013-02-22 00:10
hi French
Yeah, but those old oaks spread their pollen everywhere lol. Hmmm...........'course I know quite a few old Men who do the same. line 4 might want to change can to could. But this poem brought a smile to an old bald guy.............stan
Frenchf
Sat, 2013-02-23 17:27
Right about the pollen
And about the could. Ill change it!
scribbler
Sat, 2013-02-23 23:14
forgive me
I've suddenly contracted a case of the sillies
Why a tree is better than a man
1. they always have "wood"
2. they might leaf but they'll never leave
3. they never hog the conversation
4.you can climb all over them and they don't get the wrong idea
5. they are patient
6. they don't mind if You hog the blanket
7. you don't have to worry about them running around
8. they may go bald but they recover each spring
9. They are upright solid citizens
!0. You can crush their nuts with a hammer and they don't mind
..................OK it's out of my system now lol.........stan
Ian.T
Sun, 2013-02-24 02:56
Stan
is that where the saying the "Sawing of Wild Oaks" comes from ????
Lmao Ha Ha, Yours, Sparrow..
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Frenchf
Mon, 2013-02-25 07:32
YOu guys are so funny
Irrespective of your being an old bald guy you are fantastic stan!
loved
Mon, 2013-02-25 09:17
what is remarkable about oaks
apart from spreading pollen(equivalent to human males...) freely...
they have a bigishhhhh girth tooo
and as Stan says
the wood is always understood...
it always stands
not funny
but marrying a tree is
would you Eff?...
You could take off an
f
and replace it with
L....
loved
Frenchf
Tue, 2013-02-26 13:07
Quite intelligent
that comment. French letters?