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life's twists
life's twists
all life through
struggle is nothing new
we have our own share..
some are born with golden spoons
many on blades of grass
quite a few when the moon is shy
and about to die …
while few in the glory of sun bask
we pretend we wear
an invisible mask,
to hide our shattered bones within us
most see the darkness of life,
others only enjoy spice
they are the optimists of the day
Oh! what of pessimists you may say
an isolated few
seem to be cats whiskers...
know all kind
as they know fuck all..
yet the world continues
as white tea,
one brews!
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
Frenchf
Fri, 2013-03-15 03:48
I enjoyed it
Up until the stanza about pessimists. From then on it was not good and felt just added on
loved
Fri, 2013-03-15 08:29
at least you enjoyed..
which half matters least
hope you know
that joke
loved
Frenchf
Fri, 2013-03-15 15:24
No I don't know that joke. Please tell
Me which half matters.
Yes first half was good
loved
Fri, 2013-03-15 20:14
some time as u add more experience
you will know
first half does always
loved