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valley of no return
There in the valley
There is the valley
only one I know of
and
reading your version
will make me drown
in that valley of no return
where one has been
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
Geezer
Tue, 2013-08-20 01:17
Sorry loved...
If it is the "Valley of No Return" then no one can ever have BEEN there. Because [been] implies that one is no longer there. But, maybe they just left and didn't come back here? That way, they didn't return!
As always, ~ Gee
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loved
Tue, 2013-08-20 11:02
valley of supposedly no return was
I thought a cliche kind
maybe I'm wrong
it is or was
like an experience where one would continue to stay
as if for ever as if == desire of no return
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Ian.T
Tue, 2013-08-20 18:22
Loved
As with Gee, you cannot have been in the Valley of no return.
Though with Poetic licence you can do as you will lol.
That you are here and witnessed that valley from your point of view is good, we shall celebrate that you never set foot in there it is a desolate place..
Great to see you, as sense prevailed, and protected your Sojourn with the thoughts of staying with us here, Yours Ian.T
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So find more reasons to believe in others..
loved
Tue, 2013-08-20 19:33
SO FAR so good
till i decide to stay there
not to return
loved