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it will always be you
I ache to be held in your arms
and have you nuzzle my hair
I can still smell cool water
on my sheets
your face
has become a mask
where once
I could read you
with a look,
I am now clueless
our house is tumbling down
lumber passes your head
without a single glance
your eyes are veiled
their darkness
impenetrable,
I search for a glimmer
of hope, finding none
the enemy within
love, is devouring me
one tiny piece at a time
it’s stripping my sanity
into mere ribbons of reality
the scent of nights together
haunt my sleep
I reach for your form
to find a vast endless space
I have become a husk
consumed by what
was once a blessing
my complete
utter adoration
of you
and now,
until my heart stops its beating
and my lungs stop breathing
I will forever and always
hold this love for you
Comments
Geremia
Tue, 2014-01-14 08:20
This made my heart sink,
This made my heart sink, Beautifully written, I feel the loss and loneliness. I know it well. I wish there were an answer,
Love from your Joe
Seren
Tue, 2014-01-14 08:30
Dearest Joe
I feel like my hearts been crushed but a friend keeps saying time will heal but I don't know that I have that much time left in my life, he was (I thought) the great love of my life, and I will always hold this love for him I just need to find a way to get through each day without wanting to not see tomorrow
my children have all left home I'm now alone so I guess my poetry and my music will totally consume me someone said to me my best poetry is still to come I will immerse myself in the words and maybe find a little peace in my writing
I know there is must be more for me but its hard to see the light at the moment
with much love your Jayne xxxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Geremia
Tue, 2014-01-14 09:21
I understand more than you
I understand more than you know, The loneliness and the longing can be unbearable. What you need to do is confront him and get ANGRY!!!!!
Love from your Joe
Seren
Tue, 2014-01-14 09:24
Dearest Joe
I haven't got any anger in me at the moment its just all sadness the longing and loneliness is the hardest thing you are so very right big hugs
love your Jayne xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Geremia
Tue, 2014-01-14 09:30
There is always a chance he
There is always a chance he will come back, but you may not want him,
your Joe
Seren
Tue, 2014-01-14 09:38
I am pretty sure its over I
I am pretty sure its over I just have to look ahead and try and find a path through life without him
your Jayne xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Geremia
Tue, 2014-01-14 09:51
HEART TO HEART
HEART TO HEART
Where does a heart
broken and torn
hide
when everything
goes wrong.
What is the magic potion
to heal the pain
stop the longing
and bring us back
from dark places
again,
Seren
Tue, 2014-01-14 10:25
oh Joe
How beautifully put it brought a tear thank you so much, we can search out that elusive magic potion together big big hugs xxx
Love always your Jayne xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Rula
Tue, 2014-01-14 14:55
Jayne
This is sad. I hope it would go for your good instead. I always believe that we never know what's good and what's bad for ourselves. Just wait and I'm sure you'll overcome all this.
Last stanza, L1 "until my heart stops its beating" I thought you don't need the "it's"
Just a tiny thing you might like to consider or forget all about it. It won't make that change.
Take care dear.
❤❤❤❤❤❤
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Seren
Wed, 2014-01-15 10:55
Rula
Right now I am taking it one day at a time, thanks for your comment and support its very much appreciated
On the last stanza I deliberately put in the 'its' after I wrote that line giving it a life of its own in my mind
I will give it some thought to removing it this is just a rough draft I haven't the heart to come back to it just yet
thank you again
love JC xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Roscoe Lane
Tue, 2014-01-14 18:26
Look inside,
Look inside yourself i think there's a wonderful person there, reading this and some of your other poetry tells me this. You will overcome this, and again i say reading your poetry i think he is the one whose losing someone very special. Love Roscoe...
Roscoe Llane,
Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.
Seren
Wed, 2014-01-15 10:57
Dear Roscoe
You guys have been a boon of strength for me when I have needed a lift up I cant thank you enough for your very kind and generous comment, I will get through it I just have to find my way on my own and its something new and terribly frightening at the moment but as with most things I will come back hopefully not too jaded
much love JC xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Ian.T
Tue, 2014-01-14 19:26
Jayne
Roscoe's advice about looking inside is great, just do it ASAP, then you will see all the things that you are not what or how others perceive you.
You are not being fair to yourself, But I think logic will prevail and that loving lovely lady will emerge once again to do battle with life, have you forgotten that Aussie Boadicea I wrote about?? This poem needs attention then stored in a box for always, Yours as always, Ian.T xx
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Seren
Wed, 2014-01-15 11:00
Ian
I did new things today things I haven't done in an age, it got me out of my mindset for a couple of hours and I am doing a little better I wont say for quite some time that I am over it but the support of family and friends at this very difficult time has helped me more than you could all know, I am quietly trying to find myself again and hopefully be back to something of myself real soon
my love always JC xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Ian.T
Wed, 2014-01-15 15:57
Jayne
The now is all I can give where before is past and next is the future, we can change the future in our now, just have to give out love to all we know You will become whole again and stand there as your party pic showed lol.
I will talk later as tomorrow arrives, which is your today.
Yours as always Ian.T
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Seren
Thu, 2014-02-06 08:18
Smiles
Tomorrow was a few days away now, I have been busy this week didn't have time to scratch myself then I was having some severe internet issues but they are all sorted now :)
talk to you in the next couple of days
love always JC xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
loved
Tue, 2014-01-14 19:41
Deprivation is
the foundation stone of creativity,
just ask any successful one
many like me alone,
amidst many a dark situation
lurk about
but inclinations
I haven't given to any
the limits of my yields
have yet to sprout,
of that I have no doubt
but to be lonely
just to brood isn't the purpose of life,
we left our parents in the far oceans of life
and stayed on to surf all alone
haven't we
So take not to heart
there is so much still,
time is a blessing
your heart do search
and move on with the sojourn
the destination is yet not in sight,
take a night flight to see paradise
loved
Ian.T
Wed, 2014-01-15 02:57
Loved
As a comment this is wise and well written as a poem for future use it could be better than good.
Lovely advice to Jayne I think now that the message is loud and clear, that we as a group will always be there.
Thank you Loved for your write, as I read nearly all the comments this is up there with the best, Yours Ian.T
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Seren
Wed, 2014-01-15 11:06
Ian
Loved hit a chord and for a small time I let the pain recede somewhat
I am a very lucky woman to have such special people in my life its times like these you can really appreciate the most excellently good people who hold us up when our legs wont or cant.
thank you for being here
love always JC xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Seren
Wed, 2014-01-15 11:03
Dear Dear Loved
I read your comment earlier today it got me out of my doom and gloom for a few hours and I looked into the night paradise and let my mind go into other things for a while
So thank you for your very kind words they were just what I needed to hear big big big hugs
love JC xxxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
raj
Wed, 2014-01-15 13:43
Hi Jayne
What can I say? I am at a loss of words truly, except that this write has opened up your heart & soul and one can sense your unconditional love pouring out like crystal clear water in rapids...
hugz..
raj (sublime_ocean)
Seren
Sat, 2014-02-01 07:37
Dearest Raj
I am so sorry I don't know why but I missed answering your comment when you posted it please accept apologies for my lateness, You have read me well yet again my friend
I am very happy you liked it, thanks for the comment and your thoughts they are appreciated
much love and hugs JC xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
alidzain
Fri, 2014-01-31 18:30
JC
oh dear , it always ache when its over. I really feel for you. I wish I could say that at least you have felt love while there are others who are still searching for love, clueless to its trial but I know those words won't make facing the pain any easier.
This piece brings back my own memories of heartaches., that's how good it is. I have a suggestion. let your poetry be a form of theraphy.Its what I have done when I was betrayed by a friend and my ex. Writing and prayers become my salvation.They help me get back on track .Let it all out. All I can do for you here is to pray for you and continue to support you.
Love and hugz
Alid
you'll always have a friend in me..
Seren
Sat, 2014-02-01 07:40
Dear Alid
What can I say my break up is recent and its still painful but with each day it gets a little easier to open my eyes it gets easier to go through the motions of living, I have always used my writing as a form of therapy its only been in the last five or six years that I have become more serious with it, Thank you for your prayers and kind wishes they are always appreciated
I am glad my poem touched that place for you, it means I am conveying my emotions across the page
many thanks love and hugs JC x
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
alidzain
Sat, 2014-02-01 08:01
JC
you know what you are good at, girl. keep doing it.keep on rolling.
love and hugs
Alid
Seren
Sat, 2014-02-01 08:08
Alid
I teach singing and have sung for nearly 33 years, but writing poetry and lyrics for songs are my passion I still love to sing but writing seems to give me what I need at the moment, I will write as long as my hands move and my mind works and I can see lol
love and hugs JC x
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
raj
Sat, 2014-02-01 09:06
Jayne
Oh! I didn't know you teach singing and write lyrics besides fine poetry., though I knew you are a teacher in arts. In fact, I have also indulged in writing lyrics, will PM you some.
Keep singing to blot out all negative sounds and murmurs.
Much love..
raj (sublime_ocean)
Seren
Sat, 2014-02-01 09:17
Raj
One day I expect I will go deaf, when I write I listen to music when I am doing things around the house, I listen to music etc. I think you get the picture
I truly believe that music does soothe the soul, I love instrumental music but I also love opera, my taste's are very eclectic I love country Jazz I love big band music, god I could go on all night but I wont
I appreciate the beauty of art I have always wished I could draw I dabble a little with paint every now and them but I am really really bad at it...
I just don't want to lose my sight I think of all my senses its the one I would miss the most, its my one great fear
Thanks Raj
love and hugs JC xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
raj
Sat, 2014-02-01 15:35
Dearest Jayne
May music keep resonating in your heart beats always and I pray for all your senses to remain intact because you do justice to all these gifts we humans are blessed with
much love...
raj (sublime_ocean)
Seren
Thu, 2014-02-06 08:19
Raj
Thank you big hugs
much love and hugs JC xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
alidzain
Sat, 2014-02-01 08:21
jc
i wish i could sing
but the frogs will laugh at me
i draw manga, hooked on anime
other than indulge myself in poetry
love and hugs
Alid
Seren
Sat, 2014-02-01 08:23
Smile I heard a man say that
Smile I heard a man say that he couldn't sing once, and one night he was a little on the drunk side and out came the most beautiful baritone you have ever heard, big smile.
love and hugs JC
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
alidzain
Sat, 2014-02-01 08:30
the funny part
is that he is unaware of it.
love and hugs
Alid
Seren
Sat, 2014-02-01 08:58
Oh he's not unaware of it
Oh he's not unaware of it anymore I make sure of that and every chance I get I get him up singing he really has a great voice :)
love and hugs JC
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
alidzain
Sat, 2014-02-01 09:09
good
;)
Seren
Thu, 2014-02-06 08:19
Smile love JC xx
Smile
love JC xx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats