Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.
Another World
If I could figure out how, this poem would be entered in the limmerick contest, anyway folks I hope some may enjoy it.
Snug under the covers I go
to a world which no one can know.
then slide down the bed
sheet over my head
as outside its twenty below.
Editing stage:
(c) Neopoet.com. No copyright is claimed by Neopoet to original member content.
Comments
Rula
Fri, 2016-04-01 08:52
hello Keith
I thought this is not a bad limerick at all (not so sure about the anapestic meter though, I am still practicing it myself.)
However this gave me a chuckle, picturing you snugging/ snuggling under all the covers in such a cold climate ;)
Wish you the best in the contest.
P.S. To enter this for the limerick's contest you need to choose Edit> choose from the contest's drop window at the bottom of the page (April 2016 - Limerick - Prize -$25 USD Amazon.com Gift Certificate) > save
Hope this helps
❤❤❤❤❤❤
Please follow me on Instagram https://instagram.com/poetry.jo?igshid=YmMyMTA2M2Y=
Keith Logan
Fri, 2016-04-01 12:28
limerick
Twenty below was exageration for comic effect but I suppose this still works
Snug under the covers I go
to a world which no one can know.
then slide down the bed
sheet over my head
as outside its still five below.
Keith Logan
the happy chappy
https://www.neopoet.com/community-guidelines
Rula
Fri, 2016-04-01 16:23
hello again
I see you've successfully entered your submission to the contest.
Any changes/ revisions you wish to do can be excuted by clicking on the edit button and saving the changes you wish to have.
Regards
❤❤❤❤❤❤
Please follow me on Instagram https://instagram.com/poetry.jo?igshid=YmMyMTA2M2Y=
weirdelf
Tue, 2016-04-12 13:12
The prime rules of limericks are
the AABBA rhyming scheme.
The BB lines being shorter and can be combined into one line.
The meter need not be strictly Anapaestic but should be consistent.
I especially like this as it is not straight-forwardly comic or bawdy, has almost a haiku quality.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry