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BAUDELAIRE SCENE

winter like white moss
sculpts and moves
sinuos stretched
Wind Shadows made
in mystery rivers

the daylight prismic gold
shimmering with its pierced
sun stare bold and
cold
the mists cleansed
in clarity
a definition sold
through atmospheric devotion
to the detail
every shinning feather
of the dark crow
atop the pole
perch elaborate preening

a window winged phantom
slipping on the snowy surface
a jubilee sun blazes indifferent

patent voices in passing
hard pressed platter soundtracks
refracting from the stellar depths
ice and sullen bare pavement
steaming on hot days
myopic dreams in toffee puddles
pavement lakes pothole crater lands
pedestrian sidestep leap
while ray ban drivers stream by
a mortgage of traffic

the sunlight fills winters thoughts
with alluvial sunset variation
coffee brown irise
chocolate smile
and blue purpose
light as Julys carefree
judgements
green tinged exotic river
eyes flicked with lashes
like an overhang
riverbank

a potion of sights
a plethora of rich
embezzelled emotions
toyed flirtation
and given in lipped
curled smile
and nod
curtsied head bobs
the blush response
like a symphonys
conductor wave

the traffic and the trade
of live
congested
convergance and social
encouragement
the little beats
of the grandeur hearts
as spring steals near

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Comments

Hangs in every inventive line of this piece Esker, the early stanzas dreamlike in their depiction of winter. Made me think of crisp christmas mornings with basin beatles haircuts, breathing out gouts of condensation , my brother and I crunching up slippery driveways with Shiney new bsa yellow racing bikes, into the Virgin snow. The kids flooding out of their huddle hole houses with the tantalizing new contraptions, ready for crazy death-defying sled rides, then wading through endless pristine paddocks with horse chestnut skeletal trees, when whoa! Your brother disappears down a concealed farmers ditch into an abyss of snow..winters were cold back then, rugged up, squeaking wet freezing wool gloves, improvised igloos, iceball battles till dusk. Wandering through the wood heavy laden like icing on innumerable cakes. That line hit me: "myopic dreams in toffee puddles" - love the imagery.
Then the slow, slushy thaw, the nights drawing in, the cars seeming to pass with melancholy.

Great portrait, felt the cold meditative snap of your season..

Thanks Esker

Chris Hall - Tasmania

Grossbooted draymen rolled barrels dullthudding out of Prince's stores and bumped them up on the brewery float. On the brewery float bumped dullthudding barrels rolled by grossbooted draymen out of Prince's stores.

today its snowing those snow pellets and cold...more snow headed our way..cold..."huddle hole houses" great line! your comment is a story that is great..squeaking wet wool gloves! who would even capture that.....I forgot about that! excellent line! Icing like innumerable cakes...
my line toffee puddles....my mom dad drank coffee..sister too.....coffee mate so save on cream or for a time they used condensed milk when they were together..early years....our kid years...the color of that was the color of the mud and sand mixture from the highway and salt....when it warmed up the pavement from the sun got hot it turns to dust...waiting for the yellow bus in mornings the cars would woosh past and grit and the taste of the salt in the air would be present! At our grandfathers and grandmothers they used a woodstove..the nickle plate...wood warmer..and hot water reservoir was all there..we would toboggan on a nearby hill and dry our
snow boots..then felt liners with rubber bottoms and synthethic resistant tops with drawstring! winter socks...gloves..steaming! I remember the love of dusk too...that color...and we would go out in the wildest weather....that ride down like you say! Over in our park they built a hill for this and we have one downtown too...from the mall I can watch cars in the parking lot..the traffic on the highway main running through the city and on the hill the kids and moms and dads with the kids....I cant remember the last time I went sledding....I have a plastic rolled up crazy carpet...mostly I take my dog for walks once in awhile....and at night we would put our mitts on a pipe that came from the furnace...not hot enough to cause harm...dry enough for mitts and boots on another register...it was fun.....often my brother and I would sink into the snow at the edge of the porch light and woods behind us...the stars overhead..the end of dusk..traffic on the distant highway across the swamp rail line and open meadow...jets blinking overhead...just quiet..letting and watching the snow flakes fall..till the cold seeped up from the thick ground cover through our sweaters and snowsuits..then we would run laughing down the hill terrified of wolves...some telly all of us gathered about or hockey night in canada and off to the dreamland later....homework if there was any...winter wasnt a bane....still not really too me....I still find wonder in it!!

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