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Bloody Matters Of The Heart
False hope
Your mistake
You were warned
About tempting fate
The three words
Most long to hear
Rolled off your tongue
To my wounded ear
You melted the numbness
Made me feel when I couldn't
Broken promises
You will render no more
Lucky for you
I know just where to look
Foolish boy
Playing hit and run with my heart
Squirming is futile
Your screams are pathetic
Duct tape it is then
Now hold still while I twist it
How does it feel
To see your own heart beating
Bleeding out in the hands of another
Are you sorry now?
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Rosewood Apothecary
Mon, 2023-01-16 19:44
Well then
See that’s musical. I’m not sure I can do that one but you have a good sense of time signature whether it’s deliberate or not.
Anyway, dumb ass messed with the wrong woman lol. You don’t toy with the Valkyries
RoseBlack
Mon, 2023-01-16 19:50
Definitely messed with the wrong Valkyrie
He was warned ahead of time and didn't pay attention.
~RoseBlack~
RoseBlack
Mon, 2023-01-16 21:01
And I have had my share
Glad you enjoyed it! Just once I would like an apology...an explanation...something...even if I have to show them their own heart bleeding...enough is enough
~RoseBlack~
Candlewitch
Tue, 2023-01-17 06:47
dear Carrie,
sometimes a girl has to resort to drastic measures to get her point across! what simpletons they are, or is it pride getting in their way?
* hugs, Cat
p.s.
I asked eddy, he said it is a lack of humility and they can't see past the bulge in their pants!
*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
RoseBlack
Tue, 2023-01-17 07:05
I think Eddy is correct
And it isn't like this dance hasn't been done before...but she took a chance and it didn't work out well for him. Poor SOB!
~RoseBlack~
Jackweb
Tue, 2023-01-17 14:50
Wow
Woven with creative beauty. I like the delivery, language and rhythm as well. This is one of your best! Nice job!!!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
RoseBlack
Tue, 2023-01-17 14:59
Thank you
For such high praise!!! I have had many to learn from...yourself included.
~RoseBlack~