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To The Chagrin Of A Dare-Devil Grammarian

Submitted by brittle light on Thu, 2018-06-07 23:18

a lengthy poem I wrote
depthy in meaning
and breadthy in scope
yet ranked heighthiest
on a list
of lite-weighty tripe and
curtly dismissed

damn prissy grammar police!

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scribbler

Sun, 2018-06-10 11:58

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This is funny but only on the surface. Worth reading just to see "depth. breadth and weightiest" which would likely be jailed by the grammar police.........stan

brittle light

Tue, 2018-06-12 03:55

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yup!
if length can be lenghty, why can't depth be depthy, or breadth be breadthy etc.
oh well....to fight the power, or not? that is my question

thanks

Al

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IRiz

Fri, 2018-06-22 15:32

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Yes, a flighty write!

IRiz

brittle light

Fri, 2018-06-22 17:40

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"flighty"
are you doing a play on words?
or
are you using the literal definition: flaky, empty headed, unstable

either, I would accept

Al

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IRiz

Fri, 2018-06-22 19:07

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I didn't even know the meaning existed. Just wanted to join the game making up words.
The word turned out to be taken:(

IRiz

raj

Fri, 2018-06-22 16:26

i would say thus

when on a long drive one needs to bend the rules to make sure you have enough fuel to reach the destination [poetic essence]
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raj (sublime_ocean)

brittle light

Fri, 2018-06-22 17:26

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OK

Al

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