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Christmas Day

Submitted by Clentin on Mon, 2023-12-18 12:15

Xmas
The birth of Christ
Life’s everlasting gift
Offered freely and with great love
Christmas

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Editing - rough draft
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Not Explicit Content

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RoseBlack

Mon, 2023-12-18 19:52

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You have summed it up well with your poem. Simple and elegant! Good job..merry Christmas.

~RoseBlack~

Clentin

Mon, 2023-12-18 21:43

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Thanks Rose, again I am trying a cinquain.

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Geezer

Mon, 2023-12-18 20:58

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use Birthday as your first word? Then you will have a two-syllable word without having to ignore the third syllable in X-mas
Day? Unless of course, you want to say X-mas day for a particular reason? In that case, why not just say X-mas?
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Clentin

Mon, 2023-12-18 21:44

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I used Xmas Day because it was two syllables for the first line. I double checked the syllable count.

Hank you flor reading and your comments

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Geezer

Mon, 2023-12-18 21:56

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X / mas / Day, how is that two?
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Clentin

Tue, 2023-12-19 07:18

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I checked it with the app syllable counter more than twice, it makes Xmas as 1 syllable, I originally had Yuletide but it came out 3 syllables rather than the required 2?
Could it be wrong?
I see it counted both ways, I will edit thanks.

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Geezer

Tue, 2023-12-19 13:36

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the one who is wrong, what say the rest of you? How would you pronounce Xmas?
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Clentin

Tue, 2023-12-19 14:39

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I saw Xmas listed as 2+syllable and akso as 1 syllable!,!!!!

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Clentin

Tue, 2023-12-19 14:39

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I saw Xmas listed as 2+syllable and akso as 1 syllable!,!!!!

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Candlewitch

Tue, 2023-12-19 13:46

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maybe you could use (Yule) instead of xmas and (Yuletide) instead of Christmas?

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Clentin

Tue, 2023-12-19 14:41

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The problem is Yule is only 1syllable, Yuletide 3?

Cinquain calls for 2 syllable word to begin and end with.
Thanks for comments

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Lavender

Tue, 2023-12-19 21:22

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Hello, Clentin,
Hmm...not certain why the syllable app would give Xmas a one syllable count, nor give yuletide 3 syllables. That's a quandary! I would agree that Xmas is 2, yuletide is 2, and also toss in the option to perhaps use "Noel." Just a thought.
Merry Christmas to you!
L

Clentin

Tue, 2023-12-19 23:02

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Thank you . I will decide what to use.

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Geezer

Wed, 2023-12-20 10:48

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all the people that wanted to help! Makes my heart glad! ~ Geez.
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