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D U S T E R

Submitted by Esker on Wed, 2016-05-18 16:36

vinyl seat
vanilla and cream
the miles streaming
Living the dream
across Alberta
the Prairies
ideal
gas and lodging
then was a steal
the giants of
commerce
all mountains
of glass
we were tiny
and humbled
in the tall of
the pass
Wind whipping
songs from
the vintage
cassettes
all giddy
excited most
taking bets
..
and there I
get interupted
by Bunni
yelling now
gotta go
something about
a sticker on her
wall upstairs

life of a poet!

Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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jane210660

Wed, 2016-05-18 17:45

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I love the rhythm of this, it's really pacey, just like driving miles. Love this. Jx

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brittle light

Thu, 2016-05-19 19:43

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ROAD TRIP! every one loves 'em, or has

universal becomes personal
personal becomes universal

this speeds along... the rhyme, unobtrusive...and a 'let's do it again' joy

Bunni cut you off an aesthetically appealing spot...sometimes less is more.

very satisfying

Al

judyanne

Fri, 2016-05-20 08:05

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She spoilt it all
I was so on that road trip with you Steve. ..

Geat pacing, and rhyme

Love judy
xxx

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Esker

Fri, 2016-05-20 13:03

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"I gotta go" "Im hungry!"
cigarettes..burger..
slushy..

all a part of the adventure
even now
gotta go
mall with Bunni!
my lil bud!

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