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Entanglement

Submitted by Jillian Morris on Fri, 2022-10-21 22:30

Brushing of your hand on my breast
Lingering kiss leaving you craving more
Soft wisps of hair lightly brushed away
Warm embrace skin touching skin
Flitters of lust felt through your spine
Eyes like magnets the whole world stops
Dew from your lips melt on my neck
My body arches leaning into you
Becoming one heat rises through my toes
Leaving this place for one of ecstasy
Tidal waves of passion run through our veins
Creating connection releasing rage
Lust becomes emotion
Setting our love free

Style / type: 
Free verse
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Editing stage: 
Not actively editing
Contest: 
Neopoem Of The Week October 16th to October 22 2022
Content level: 
Explicit Content

Comments

Ray Whitaker

Sat, 2022-10-22 08:17

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Evocative. Reached me this morning! Lovely piece!

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