The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem demonstrates a clear understanding of rhythm and rhyme, which is commendable. However, there are areas where the rhythm is inconsistent, which can disrupt the flow for the reader. For instance, the line "bustin' bronks, winning prizes and glories" is noticeably longer than the surrounding lines.

The poem also exhibits a strong emotional connection between the speaker and the subject, which is effectively communicated through the repeated use of personal pronouns. However, the poem could benefit from more concrete imagery to further evoke the reader's emotions and to paint a more vivid picture of the relationship.

The poem's theme of a father-daughter relationship is clear, and the use of colloquial language, such as "bustin' bronks," gives the poem a personal and intimate feel. However, the language can be more varied and rich to add depth to the narrative.

The poem's structure is generally consistent, with each stanza containing four lines. However, the last stanza contains five lines, which breaks this pattern. It would be beneficial to maintain a consistent structure throughout the poem to ensure a smooth reading experience.

The poem's ending is poignant and effectively concludes the narrative. However, the use of cliché in "at the end of each tunnel you are my shining light" could be replaced with a more original metaphor to make the poem more unique and impactful.

In conclusion, this poem has potential and demonstrates a good understanding of poetic techniques. With some refinement in rhythm, imagery, language, structure, and metaphor, it could be enhanced.

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Hello, Cat,
Such a loving tribute. It sounds like a very strong relationship. I, too, had a great relationship with my father, and could relate to this lovely poem. I enjoyed this!
Thank you!
L

I read this and thought about how close you must have been. it reminded me in many ways of my father and I. Only you had the challange of divorce to live with. Still he was strong enough to love and guide you. You were very lucky and blessed. Very
descriptive and softening. Great poem Cat!

Hi Cat

What a wonderful tribute to your Dad. You have mentioned in the past how close you were and it is obvious that you were both lucky to have each other.

Great job of putting that affection into poem. Congrats! - Will

I've heard your stories about your father over the last 42 years and have always wished that my father would have been there for me the way yours was. My father travelled much for work when I was young, so the bond never really formed. For the most part, he was the diciplinarian in my life, when he was around.

I am glad you had someone to take your part and oppose your mother.