The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Grim veil of a widowed sun" paints a bleak picture of a city devoid of life and color. The imagery is vivid and engaging, with the use of metaphors and personification adding depth to the poem. The opening lines, "Under this skin, a roadless city / Blind houses clustered in a corner" immediately set the tone for the rest of the poem, conveying a sense of emptiness and isolation.

The use of personification is particularly effective in the lines "flowers weep aroma and bleed essence; / floating leaves deprived of Chlorophyll / register colorless moments." These lines create a sense of loss and decay, as if the city is slowly withering away. The poem also includes some powerful metaphors, such as "rays were coffined by grim veil / of a widowed sun," which adds a layer of melancholy to the poem.

However, some of the metaphors and phrases feel overused and cliched, such as "shedding minutes like mothers tears" and "register colorless moments." These phrases detract from the overall impact of the poem, and could benefit from some rephrasing to make them feel more original and impactful.

One suggested line edit could be to change "O tenants there is no sign of a rainbow" to "O tenants, no rainbow heralds hope." This change adds a more poetic and concise phrasing to the line, while still conveying the same sense of despair and hopelessness. Overall, "Grim veil of a widowed sun" is a solid poem with engaging imagery and strong use of metaphor, but could benefit from some refinement and editing to elevate it even further.

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