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I Swear, This is the Last I'll Write About You

More tears on these empty pages...

I can only write about you so much
before every page is flooded with
"I love you"
"I miss you"
"Come home"
"Goodbye"

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content
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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem demonstrates a strong emotional resonance, effectively using repetition to emphasize the speaker's feelings of longing and loss. However, it could benefit from more varied language and imagery to create a more nuanced portrayal of these emotions.

For instance, the phrases "I love you", "I miss you", "Come home", and "Goodbye" are quite direct and common in expressing feelings of longing. To make the poem more unique and engaging, consider using metaphors, similes, or other figurative language to convey these feelings in a more indirect and creative way.

Additionally, the concept of pages being 'flooded' with words is a compelling image, but it could be further developed. Consider exploring this metaphor more deeply, perhaps by describing the physical effects of this 'flooding' or by extending the metaphor to other aspects of the speaker's life or emotions.

Lastly, the poem's title, "It's Always The Last Poem... And Then Another", suggests a cycle or pattern of behavior. However, this concept isn't clearly reflected in the body of the poem. To strengthen the connection between the title and the poem, consider incorporating elements of repetition or cyclical behavior into the poem itself.

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This is so good because of it's brevity. It was great to join you emotionally. Ruby :) xx

Give and grow - let's raise our verses together. I'm happy to comment on your work and appreciate a comment on mine.

Very much, Ruby Lord!

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