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Light my Fire

Submitted by samary on Fri, 2020-02-28 13:48

You said light my fire
An arsonist to light the pyre
Would that be, an all consuming flame
Or a smouldering burn, more easily contained
Is this to be a single conflagration
Or the match, to an eternal flame, of integration
Would it be the flame of lust
Burning heat then ashes and dust
Or the cleansing flame to warm the soul
Your invitation based on desire, wanting to be whole
You said light my fire
Standing with a match do I have that desire?

Samantha Beardon

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - polished draft

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Geezer

Sat, 2020-02-29 08:36

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suggestion is rather than use the line: "Standing with a match do I have that desire?" I would ask:
I've got the matches, do I have the desire?
~ Geezer.
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