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Master's degree in frozen hearts (edit)

My dear friend
my hands holding yours
But
I’m seeing the stars nearer to me than you
Arrogant
And master of misunderstanding
No spoken words
Nor sign language
That little brain can get
Your boundaries here on earth
While mine
There among the galaxy
Brilliant in losing the subject
Excellent in gambling with words
Amazing as a passionate friend
I realized
Neither you nor I will meet one day
Only if you would read me
Through my eyes
But you can’t
How could I call you my beloved?
You killed the last spark in my eyes
And extinguished the last flame in my heart
With pretended coolness passion
You will never know
When we fall in love
You will never understand
Who you are to me
Now
And for ever
To be dear friends
We should walk towards the same path
To be in love with you
That is suicide
Congratulations my friend
You deserve your Master degree
In frozen hearts

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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This poem is dedicated to "Kaligantsaros" , "Theo" or "M". He is great poet and trouble maker too, "wink'" I don't know why he is not around yet and I'm wondering if he got an invitation here , or not yet. I'm dedicating this poem to him, because he brought something new in me , and basically in my writing, the effort I did here was guided by him He is cruel, but he is great guide. thanks Theo.
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Comments

Unsure how to comment on this poem which is so interwoven with its subject. I see a great deal of accuracy in the description of a man either unable or unwilling to go to the trouble of being civil in his criticisms. A pity that his talent remains so well hidden due to his personality.......................stan

Thanks for the comment.
You know ,one friend told me that this poem (Anti men poem),but I don't think so.
it is a simple description for certain situation .

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Glad to see you

Mona Rose

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I don't see it as anti- men...........stan

Good to see you too,but I prefer to see a comment on my poem rather than greeting or anything else.

Mona Rose

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An interesting poem Mona.
I liked the title it drew me in and though I just get the chance to read the odd poem at present here on Neo I felt I should take the time to comment on this.
I would like to take the poem as it appears and have tried to block out the background to this that I knew of through the Rex Mundo poems but I apologise if that somehow colours my comments.
This comes across as a wispy whimsical poem of love that could have been but never happened and I am reminded so starkly that this has happened to you twice ...yes with the same man or the same apparent man but it begs the question of the lines

Your boundaries here on earth
While mine
There among the galaxy

You obviously portray yourself as the better human specimen in this particular piece of writing but I have to wonder at the image in your head of who that person really is.

Kaligantsaros is many things but never a frozen heart so once again I think you have got it wrong.

Best Wishes
Seabhac

Interesting comment

Just to make it clear:.
The poem is not a description for any one.
The story built by my own imagination,
Maybe the idea came from one lady was complaining her beloved when she said he is the absent mind and the present body.

Such stories too much familiar in the east "specially in my culture", when you think that you are in love with someone while he is .....NOT.
so you may say it is not "a wispy whimsical poem of love " ,

The person in my poem will never be in my life..
___________________________________________________
Your question:

Your boundaries here on earth
While mine
There among the galaxy

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In my culture, it is too often when two lovers say such things, when one of them trying to explain something but without using speech.
We believe that beloved ones able to understand each other without using spoken words.
All what I want to say here, that her beloved is DUMB.

And as I said up there the total work is dedicated to the man who guided me and was behind my efforts to improve my writing.

Thanks Seabhac

and good to see you here

Mona Rose

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It is interesting how one person could be so many many things to different folks.. If i were young I could have fallen in love with him or someone like him.

Indiscreet, challenging, passionate, sarcastic, witty and imaginative with more than a touch of irony, but deserving of a master's degree in a frozen heart? I think not. Perhaps a heart frozen by time and distance.....an inability to bridge cultures....

However, I did write several times and mentioned my missing two of the most clever, outstanding poets who seemed to manage to get themselves in trouble.... Kal/Theo and Weirdelf/Jess. I miss (what is his real name, I don't think it is Ephram) who was able to write under numerous identities, each with a different style. I miss Patrick, others who rarely post poems it seems, the list grows longer every day. I miss Jayne.

The site could use Jess' and Theo's honesty and their ability to push poets beyond their status quo. Even Jonathan has slacked off in that department. I love Neopoet, but I don't like the lukewarm atmosphere. An almost passionless grey pallor seems to have descended.

Who are we without someone to push our buttons, make us take note of ourselves?

Good to see you Seabhac. and Mona.

~Anna

I believe that the man who will be (Indiscreet, challenging, passionate, sarcastic, witty and imaginative), will Never be with master degree in frozen hearts.

If I want to write a poem to him, I 'm sure it would be a very warm one.lol

I miss my friends too Anna (Jess, Theo, chumfin,.,),.they used to give the site a special flavor with their honesty .

Mona Rose

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True.
love should not hurt .

Thanks and glad to see you .

Mona Rose

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It's a beautiful write, clear and precise. a nice tribute too.
everyone turns up eventually, don't worry soon they'll be no room for us. Hahaha!
thanks for sharing this dedication!
Always Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

I'm glad that you liked my poem
and I'm glad to see you here again

Mona Rose

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poem, Communicate This, I tried to show the different personalities that have come and gone here at Neo. My muse took over at the end, and maybe she did continue the line of thought in her own way. "Ready or not, here we come." I hope that this site will soon be full of those who will not be afraid to offer honest critique. However, we do not need the brutalness that existed on the site before. Honesty tempered with encouragment is the very best thing for us all. I see that in you, and hope that you will continue to be that person. Your poem is very good, and I will be back as soon as I am able to give you the honest critique that it deserves. ~ Gee

There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

I agree with you Geezer..............scribbler

Thank you so much Geezer, I really appreciate what you are trying to say here, and as I said to my friend Jess I will be honest always in my comments and that is promise.

Glad to see you here again my friend

Mona Rose

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Mona my friend this is just beautiful, so powerful and to the point when such beautiful flow, I love it. and I am so glad it is not about me haha. great write my friend

You can never pick anyone up if you are busy putting them down

Always drawing smiles on my face.
I'm glad too that is not you LOL.

Randy my friend,thanks

Mona Rose

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First off, I'd like to say that I enjoyed your poem and the
comments on it.

The title, it would be a Master's Degree, not a Master Degree.

The way I read this, the intended one does seem ignorant to
the love being sent his way ... and it seems a shame for both.
Maybe I read more into it than was there, but it left me sad for
both him and her.

hope all is good in your life

Richard

I'm going to correct the title.

Thanks

I'm great as usual and too busy at my work, and happy to see you too.

I'm sure I won’t have such story in my life, because I know and trust in my choices ::))

Hope all good in your life and nice to see ya again:)).

Mona Rose

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the flow is great..the word usage is pretty good too. i like the theme.. coz i also encountered a person like whom mona dedicated the poem...

what i like most here was the pattern of the poem..i think you are good in free("rhyme-less") poetry...you put emphasis on the picture you want your readers see through rather than the form of the poem itself..

but nevertheless ...a good write,..

keep it up..

and that was ,because I'm drawing my emotions and feelings on my pages as a poet with huge careless and more less concentration on the language or any ...
This is my big problem and I'm still careless about it..the main reason is ""my mother tongue""

Thanks peter

Mona Rose

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I read the poem as a Master not necessarily degreed, so to speak. But if you're going to change it in the
title, you need to change the 2nd last line to.

Thanks again for this poem, waking us all up a little bit, (seems we've fallen asleep since the flesh and blood old Neopoet days) Mona.

I think aside from Jess' admitted and obvious physical problems, the emotional expenditures would never have happened had the participants of both sides not so engaged. Why defend someone's criticism of one's poem to the extent that the tension exacerbates? It takes two to have a conversation or a knock down dragged out fight.

Unless you watched *Fight Club* and then you grok that the only one we're ever and always fighting with are our own denials and postulations.

~A

I feel happy when other poets criticize my work .
I feel honesty in their words, and the harder they will be the main reason I get to improve my work.
I think I made some confusion and that was between the title and content of the poem and my dedication, I’m not fighting just giving explanations..

I will work on it(the 2nd last line ).
thank you so much Anna.

love you and I love your honesty in your comments.

Mona Rose

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Dearest JC
Thank you for stepping by and commenting on this simple work.
If you love to offer any suggestions I will be glad.

Thanks

Mona Rose

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Those Arabian nights

So flow

Deep in the caresses
The ravines down below

But this much i will tell you
And you also know

Man is the child
Who doesn't know?

When to rush
Or run
And when to go slow

But you need to guide him
Men are also like
women
But woe
Has been
Interwoven

loved

you said:
Man is the child
Who doesn't know?

When to rush
Or run
And when to go slow

But you need to guide him

I say:
No spoken words
Nor sign language
That little brain can get
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Thank you for your comment.

Mona Rose

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No spoken words
Nor sign language
That little brain can get

Silence and smile convey
Much more than kisses can do,
Body language is understood,
But by minuscule few
Eyes are the windows to lover’s souls,
Who will and who doesn't
Reach life's goal,
Is never ever to anyone foretold.

Love is a mission of life,
Burdened with strife,
Be one a hubby or a wife
Life is simply
A speck of human strife

loved

Fabulous comment in a form of poem.

thanks loved

Mona Rose

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Neither you nor I will meet one day
Only if you would read me
Through my eyes
But you can’t
How could I call you my ....

beloved?

his LOSS I ASSURE YOU
YOU ARE THE BELOVED
NOT HE
I WISH THIS U KNEW

MEN ALWAYS THINK
WITH THEIR LOWER HEAD
AMEN

loved

I don't see it as anti-men. To me this poem speaks about how a person can crush within another person the very idea or belief in true romantic love. Maybe the world does that well enough on its own or maybe it takes that special someone to rid the ghost of love from your heart. Sorry I didn't respond to this poem sooner, I can't believe I didn't. Its sad but I like it very much.

John

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