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Memorial Day

Flags gently waving,
Honoring those who gave all,
Memorial Day.

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem, titled "Memorial Day," is a haiku, a traditional form of Japanese poetry. The poem adheres to the 5-7-5 syllable count commonly associated with English-language haiku. It is a concise and poignant tribute to the sacrifices made by individuals in service of their country.

One potential area for improvement could be the use of more evocative imagery. While "Flags gently waving" is a clear visual, the poem could benefit from more specific or unusual images to add depth and emotional resonance. For example, instead of "Honoring those who gave all," the poem could provide a specific example of how people honor the fallen, or it could depict a particular scene or moment that encapsulates the spirit of Memorial Day.

Lastly, the poem could benefit from a stronger connection between its images. In a haiku, the juxtaposition of two images or ideas is often used to create a sense of surprise or revelation. Here, the connection between the waving flags and the concept of honoring those who gave all is relatively straightforward. Introducing a more unexpected image or idea could make the poem more engaging and thought-provoking.

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Well written, only one beat away from a perfect haiku

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Thank you for reading and comments. I did check the syllables

5 Flags gently waving, (flags gen-tly wav-ing)
7 Honoring those who gave all, (honoring those who gave all)
5 Memorial Day. (me-mo-ri-al day) ?

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I think it can be pronounced as three or four syllables.
According to oxford it's 3 syllables
https://www.oxfordlearnersdictionaries.com/definition/english/memorial_1...

But according to websters its 4 syllables
https://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/memorial

Of course it's your call.

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Thank you. I will check several places .

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tend to agree with Clentin with this one. The colloquial accent seems about right. Nicely done anyway. ~ Geez.
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Thank you for reading and remarks. I try to get the syllable count as correct as I can.
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