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My! What A Lovely Pension You Have

Submitted by brittle light on Mon, 2016-05-16 14:12

Well, hallehluly,
you have landed a man,
and gotten him eating
out of both grubbing hands.

After fishing for years
throwing most of them back,
what makes him a keeper,
has he just got "the knack"?

You say "he makes me laugh",
but you've said that before.
"He treats me like a lady",
but they all held the door.

"He takes me to dinner".
Yeah, we've all heard of that.
But not once have you gushed,
'I'm in love with the sap'

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing stage:

Editing - draft

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jane210660

Mon, 2016-05-16 15:13

Ha ha, Just love it. Have had

Ha ha, Just love it. Have had a crap day and it made me grin. Jxx

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brittle light

Tue, 2016-05-17 13:18

Jane

thank you. I appreciate your appreciating.

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Keith Logan

Tue, 2016-05-17 05:14

Bravo

The title is a doozy and the poem does not disappoint. It's been such a long time since I wrote with such wit I doubt whether I can anymore. Still, it is always heart warming to read.

Keith Logan
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brittle light

Tue, 2016-05-17 13:29

the title amuses me too.

the title amuses me too.
(is it bad form to comment on one's own stuff?)

I'm glad you enjoyed this.

thanks,

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Esker

Tue, 2016-05-17 20:07

funny as microwaveble popcorn!

Jiffypop was all the scorn
and in a time of sugahmommas
"send photo of boat and trailer"
would apply for many hired
studs from pastureized
retirement

marriage of convenience
I know many
lived a few
I helped out
caused a commotion
and ended up getting
the pink slip
but they were handy
too packing my bags
and dropping them
off and asking for
some of the cheque
they were good cooks!
and great comfort though!
maybe they were looking
for Arthur
and I barely made a persival
great line though!
the humor reminds me
of the New Yorker cartoons
I still read and love
I make sure to sprawl
out...Like today and leaf
through the pretentious rags
I gave up trying to fit in
after wanting it so bad!
funny cause now I get
along great with all the
ex's
and Ive got a taste for
the new popcorn!
Hurray!

judyanne

Wed, 2016-05-18 07:47

lol

They're called 'love you long time brides' aren't they?

Excellent title
Love judy
xxx

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My! What A Lovely Pension You Have