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On Our Way to Colorado

It sounded like the last radio station in the West,
driving through Nevada, or maybe it was Utah.
The wireless acolyte, compelling us behind electrical static,

to accept his good Lord, and what we should do
to get in His good graces before it was too late
for those of us listening in the dark desert night.
I remember we both thought he sounded lonely,
and had some work to do there for himself.

You said we were just starting out,
so we couldn’t have done enough
to need much forgiveness from anyone.

That would come later,
from the particular tarnish
only love can render.

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Hello, Michael,
The loneliness felt here comes from all directions - the static, the vast dark desert, the alleging voice. But your final stanza makes me feel it most of all. So much happens on the way to someplace else.
Thank you!
L

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