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Submitted by Esker on Sat, 2016-05-28 00:15

gown noire
shimmer diamond
naked skies
allure of heat
the smooth
of blacktop worn
sleeps

I dream into
the whirl of
fans
contexts of magic
spun its plans
on blueprint
mirrors smudged
delay
the imagery
now left but
stays
in semi lurid
gown of glow
between the
count of hours
go
the lady waits
beside my bed
diaspora of
light in hazy
realm
a palm upon
my brow
before the
barefoot angel
finds her flight
and darkness
slips between
the trunks and
limbs of forest
proper
across rooftops
sleek winged
robber
turning toss
the visage
across my
screen
the camera
soul has
taken me

...

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Comments

Geezer

Sun, 2016-05-29 09:11

As always...

I find visions dragged across my mindscape. I always know that I will have something to think about after reading one of your poems. You leave it to the imagination, to fill in the spaces between lines.
Always, ~ Gee

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Esker

Thu, 2016-06-16 21:06

Fractual

some events cannot be tamed into the submission of a realists
brush...but painted in the tonic of exotic exclamation...
all dashes and complexity of whirls..

I don't wonder why she watched me sleep
would be like asking why people chase dragons
and ghosts
from the dream too the visage and too the dream
again will forever be there
Just there

we autofill with pattern recognition and what is in our
app addled mind from past experiences
either intuitively or survival
leaps and bounds

like writing...
minimalist and an exertion of much

thank U!

author comment

Rula

Tue, 2016-05-31 00:33

this took

many reads at different times, but today with fresh eyes and mind, and I thought wow!
Stunning!!

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Esker

Thu, 2016-06-16 21:09

Plausibility of turns

the terms of comprehensive awareness
are many
by hour
by mood
by feeling

what we want too see
what we wish too see
what we actually
see are dictates of
sequence exposures
our minds setting
up the shots
for revelations of
that perfect still

becoming writers
is one step
becoming readers
is a great step

thank U!

author comment

mand

Fri, 2016-06-17 12:38

Esker

First read - delicious imagery! I will have to revisit - to taste the pallet of new and emerging flavours!

Love Mand xxx

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