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The Road/Man Way
Chomping through mountains
and buzz cut forests,
through avalanche prone passes and
straddled ravines.
Onward, it goes.
Slithering
slowly,
relentlessly.
Snaking its way
now, 'cross desert and plain.
Seeking only distance.
More and more distance.
...Its ever elusive prey.
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Free verse
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Comments
jane210660
Tue, 2016-05-10 12:51
Very evocative. Jx
Very evocative. Jx
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brittle light
Wed, 2016-05-11 03:31
thanks Jx
thanks Jx
Al
mand
Tue, 2016-05-10 14:13
Hi Brittle Light
Clever - this is a monster consuming everything that get's in it's way, ignoring all dangers and ever hungry. I love the comparison - it's very effective and a reminder of mankind's ever consuming demands!
Thanks for sharing :)
Love Mand xxx
brittle light
Wed, 2016-05-11 03:28
Hi. Mand
thanks for your observations and reaction.
p.s. you can call me Al, if you choose!
'til next time,
Al
mand
Wed, 2016-05-11 03:38
O.k Al
You're welcome and Thank you. :)
Geezer
Wed, 2016-05-11 09:43
What a...
sneaky snake! I can hear the hiss and slither of it from here! Nice work! Love the comparison to a serpent. ~ Geezer
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brittle light
Wed, 2016-05-11 13:55
thanks for the feedback, Gee.
thanks for the feedback, Gee. I really appreciate you relaying your takes on a poem
They are always helpful.
catch you down the road,
Al