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From the silk route boom
Peace, prosperity mushroom
Thousand flowers bloom

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Structured: Eastern
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Wealth from others steal
enough for everyone
is the truth hidden

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

Your Haiku (not a Rhyku - all three lines need to rhyme in a Rhyku) is not in the 5-7-5 syllable format. Your poem is in a 5-5-5 format so it is a free verse poem. Anyway your views seem to echo the philosophy of Robin Hood - steal from the rich to give to the poor or take from the rich to give to the poor and make everyone equal in monetary terms aka Socialism or an ideal form of Communism.

However the Rhyku refers to a Communist nation, in name only, that has adopted capitalistic policies and is championing free trade and removing protectionism through an ambitious project to recreate the Silk route to benefit all the nations that participate in the plan and make a thousand flowers bloom as a former Communist icon declared during his attempts to develop his nation.

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depends on how you pronounce everyone.
But I take your point. You are the expert in this genre.

I suggest that my political ideas as expressed may not be entirely incompatible with yours.
Most especially the notion of unregulated capitalism, which requires continual growth, is incompatible with a finite planet.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

''Most especially the notion of unregulated capitalism, which requires continual growth, is incompatible with a finite planet." - very well said - hats off to you.

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sir

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

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