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THEY TOLD ME

Submitted by lovedly on Sat, 2022-07-02 22:04

God will descend to check your well being
So I went to the CHILDREN'S mass gathering

There he had come
just like any human
Smiled at me

THEN SENT MY MIND REELING

See docs told you smile till you die
you didn't listen so I came just to give you
oh silly one

one more chance
Go with kids dance
see me again after I've gone

Where he vanished in the crowd

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
They say HE exists but still can't believe it
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Candlewitch

Sun, 2022-07-03 05:37

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you are not alone. I cannot believe it either! good poem. I like where your head is at...

*love, Cat

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lovedly

Sun, 2022-07-03 12:57

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A strange occurrence happened
I composed this one thanks

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Rosewood Apothecary

Sun, 2022-07-03 18:28

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I’m not sure about god or any of that but…I know there’s magic and messages and if you’re looking around with the right lenses you see them everywhere. Great work.

Tim

lovedly

Sun, 2022-07-03 23:16

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great
thanks

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Mr joghe

Thu, 2022-07-07 20:35

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I like these lines "God will descend to check your well being
So I went to the CHILDREN'S mass gathering"
You've done well!

"Words are currency of ideas and have the power to change world. Ride your pen on the rough road."

lovedly

Thu, 2022-07-07 22:19

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Bless u 4 reading
GRATEFUL

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