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Time Machine [Limited Edition]
yesterday is done, dusted, asleep,
today is ticking away at a fast pace, slow for some
tomorrow an unbroken egg, holds awe of the unborn, may be stillborn
yesterday sows seeds for tomorrow
today, a time to harvest deeds of yesterday
tomorrow arrives with a promise, to pollinate or pollute
hold yesterday in gratitude
be thankful for today
if tomorrow comes, feel blessed
wind, unwind, set, reset, calibrate the time machine
brand it "MINE"
it's a limited edition
gifted by mother to her child
Style / type:
Free verse
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Comments
scribbler
Thu, 2018-05-10 16:34
hi raj
the machinations of time is always a good subject for reflection. Enjoyed......stan
raj
Thu, 2018-05-10 16:40
Good to see you Stan
thanks for the read and your comment. Hope your time machine is set to return home as your knee heals...
take good care and enough rest...
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raj (sublime_ocean)
Rula
Fri, 2018-05-11 11:53
Wowww
Fantastic!
I especially enjoyed the opening lines.
Limited edition? That was soooo clever dear friend.
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raj
Fri, 2018-05-11 14:34
Thanks Rula
I could hear your loud wow :) good to know you liked it...
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raj (sublime_ocean)
gregwa8
Mon, 2018-05-14 00:09
nice poem. I like the idea of
nice poem. I like the idea of our life being a time machine gifted from mother to child. this read well, and like someone else commented plays well with the concept of time.
raj
Mon, 2018-05-14 02:05
Thanks Greg
for taking time to read and respond with a comment. Good to know that you liked the theme.
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raj (sublime_ocean)