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values
we hurtle towards calamity
with the pale rider on the pale horse
and incomprehensively lethal weapons
of mass destruction
while a budget for armament
elicits continued production
animals and birds
fish and plant
suffer painful death
through spilt black gold
while we refuse to explore
more expensive sources of power
twenty-four thousand people starve and die
every day
and a million more each year
from disease
while movie stars
are worth more than physicians
.
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Free verse
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Comments
weirdelf
Fri, 2012-07-20 15:53
yes, very true and...
so what do we do?
Make the poem say something we don't already know.
Don't ask me how, that will be the test of your genius.
cheers,
Jess
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judyanne
Sat, 2012-07-21 11:44
lol jess
it was just a rant... i don't know how to fix it :)
but you have challenged me... and i'm always up for a challenge...
so far, though, anything i have thought of sounds either ‘teachy’ or supercilious lol
I’ll think on it ….
love judy xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
scribbler
Sat, 2012-07-21 11:29
hi
"The less your job actually produces, the more money you make" an old quote that grows truer every day. Nice rant..............stan
judyanne
Sat, 2012-07-21 11:45
thanks stan
love judy xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
loved
Sat, 2012-07-21 13:46
pale rider on the pale horse...
pale rider on the pale horse.
you may like to make one
either the rider or horse
play
the other could remain as pale
also just imagine
that for a year there are no deaths
so many would become jobless
and
the population will explode ,
like a volcano
and
then what next ?
an additional generation
of the saved deaths year people.
explosion for nurses attention
wowow
loved
judyanne
Sun, 2012-07-22 00:54
thanks loved
i like two 'pales' - for emphasis :)
trust you to point out the need for our being culled in one way or another to stop overpopulation....
but i was more ranting on how we value the movie star over the doctor, and destroy the earth with our drilling and resultant oil spills, when there are cleaner sources of power that are not used because of the cost...
love judy xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
Candlewitch
Sat, 2012-07-21 15:28
Dear Judy,
Your rant brings us all back to reality. The way of the world is to make the rich more so, and the cost to the planet be damned... so very sad.
love, Cat
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judyanne
Sun, 2012-07-22 00:54
dear cat
thank you for the read and comment
love judy xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)