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What do you truly want?
What do you truly want?
The question so simple
Yet so difficult
“I want money!”
“I want a car!”
“I want to be famous!”
Others answer with ease.
But those all feel so greedy.
So vain.
I know what I want.
It’s what I have always wanted
But I don’t want to say it aloud
I fear I may sound cruel.
A happy family.
I say it slowly and quietly.
Sure it isn’t money,
Or cars,
Or fame.
But it would be worth all of that.
All of that multiplied by infinity
Such a simple question.
Such a difficult answer.
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neopoet
Thu, 2023-05-18 22:08
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Geezer
Fri, 2023-05-19 09:16
I think...
that most people have at least a little discord in their family and would like to see the hurts and rifts in their familial relationships healed but are resigned to what they feel is a lost cause. So, they settle for what they think is happiness in the acquiring of material things. Your title drew me in, as I wanted to know what people want. The plain language is a big help in making this an "everyman's" poem. The pace is good, moving the thoughts right along and connecting the reader to theme.
The whole thing moves smoothly, from the opening lines to the end with a final thought of no resolution, and the opening question becoming the end. Nicely done! ~ Geezer.
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