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What is the Plan?

What is the plan?
How do we find it?
Is it something for you?
Is there some way to hide it?
As the day falls to night, sun below the horizon.
Awakening the moon, to illuminate the dark.
Once a busy place, busy no more.
A street full of life, dead, nothing more.
Fire burning violent, the cold chased away.
A man lay lifeless, starting to decay.
Gunfire, grenades, no plan to stay.
Safe from the war, no plan for the poor.
Generals and gavels, decisions to be made.
The life of a soldier, is forever to change.
Turn over the dead, shoot all the living.
A man lay lifeless, starting to decay.
Civilians rise up, answering the call.
Prisoners of war, stood against a wall.
Times have now changed, lock all the doors.
Batten down the hatches, now we're at war.
Birds now bullets, fly through the air.
Cars are now bombs, waiting to explode.
What is the plan?
Now we know what.
They want to take you,
Just have to fight it.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Review Request (Direction): 
How was my language use?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

Greetings, Herbert,
I believe this is your first poem here, and you bring much to think over. I feel the despair and frustration, and also the shock of it all and the disgust in the reality. For me, this piece may be about actual war, but it also could be about the world in general.
May I ask - "no play to stay...no play for the poor." Could you mean "plan" instead of "play"?
Thank you, and welcome aboard.
Lavender

Thankyou for pointing out my mistake, I appreciate the feedback, and yes, I based this off war with underlying meanings.

author comment

interesting piece you have. somewhat sad to contemplate, and a necessary realism.

Nice to see another "Whitaker" here on Neo. I see you are from Australia, I'm in the USA. Could we be cousins somehow, way back?

Ray

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Hi ray, My real name is not in fact Whitaker. I'm sure that nobody on here has bad intentions but I am uncomfortable using my real name online.

author comment

We Whitakers are a creative lot! laughing…..

Welcome to the site, looking forward to more of your work.

Ray

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