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On The Rocks
On The Rocks
She sat on the rocks and thought about her life
She wondered if she should use a gun or a knife?
One is quick, but it was bloody as it could be
The other is slower but was just as messy
She looked back on her life and how rocky it was
How no one could hurt her like the one she loves
No one else would love her, so she stayed
Though she knew that she was being played
She looked down from the rocks she sat upon
Through the mist, she saw what had to be done
She had no more doubts; there were no more if
She stood up thought, and she jumped off of the cliff
Review Request (Intensity):
Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
Last few words:
Stop The Abuse
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Geezer
Wed, 2022-09-28 09:05
It is...
an unfortunate part of life, that some do just that! Being so anxious and afraid of life, that they choose the unknown of death! I wonder if the thought of re-incarnation occurs to them. Do they ever think of what happens if they are re-incarnated? That they will have to come back again and again, until they get it right? In a world where people are enamored of the idea that everything turns out right at the end of the movie; I see that you have seen such ends and know that it doesn't always turn out the way we want it to. Nice job, ~ Geezer.
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Depressed 1
Wed, 2022-09-28 14:04
Thanks
Thanks Geezer
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Lavender
Wed, 2022-09-28 10:09
On the Rocks
A very profound poem. Yes, stop the abuse.
L
Depressed 1
Wed, 2022-09-28 14:05
Thanks
Thanks Lavender
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RoseBlack
Wed, 2022-09-28 17:13
An emotional write
Sparked much emotion in me. Well done.
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~RoseBlack~
Depressed 1
Thu, 2022-09-29 01:16
Thanks
Thanks RoseBlack
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victor dyck
Thu, 2022-09-29 14:08
on the rocks
alot of anguish reflection
Depressed 1
Fri, 2022-09-30 01:27
Thanks
Thanks Victor
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